for Chinese Lyfe6/28/2004 c18 
5lostbetween2worlds
omg...thats *terrible*! how could she go and kill herself? *sigh* she has problems...but she has ppl who care for her: terry, jason, evan (aim!)...
this is a great story, and i love how the plot's so complicated and twists around. just 1 suggestion: the changes from chapter to chapter are a little abrupt, perhaps if you added some filler chapters and more description the story would flow nicer.
anyway, i love your story. u need to write more! i glanced through your stories and i dont think u wrote anything this year! WRITE! its an order. *grin*
5lostbetween2worldsomg...thats *terrible*! how could she go and kill herself? *sigh* she has problems...but she has ppl who care for her: terry, jason, evan (aim!)...
this is a great story, and i love how the plot's so complicated and twists around. just 1 suggestion: the changes from chapter to chapter are a little abrupt, perhaps if you added some filler chapters and more description the story would flow nicer.
anyway, i love your story. u need to write more! i glanced through your stories and i dont think u wrote anything this year! WRITE! its an order. *grin*
6/28/2004 c6 lostbetween2worlds
aww the ending is sweetx2. and OMIGOD! PREPS! hahahaha, preps are so great to make fun of...anyway, my comp keeps on dying on me everytime i give a review, so i'll just read til the end and then give u a larger review
aww the ending is sweetx2. and OMIGOD! PREPS! hahahaha, preps are so great to make fun of...anyway, my comp keeps on dying on me everytime i give a review, so i'll just read til the end and then give u a larger review
6/28/2004 c3 lostbetween2worlds
hehehe, azn unity! and yeah...your story really does hit on a lot of being azn in america. the first part too, about most ppl not understanding.
hehehe, azn unity! and yeah...your story really does hit on a lot of being azn in america. the first part too, about most ppl not understanding.
6/28/2004 c2 lostbetween2worlds
haha, i think i've read some of this story before, and probably dropped a few reviews, but i don't think i ever finished it, so i'm rereading it. anyway, i LOVE your first chapter. it totally depicts azn parents! b's are just...nonos. alright, onto the next chapter! ^.^
haha, i think i've read some of this story before, and probably dropped a few reviews, but i don't think i ever finished it, so i'm rereading it. anyway, i LOVE your first chapter. it totally depicts azn parents! b's are just...nonos. alright, onto the next chapter! ^.^
2/9/2004 c18 Agathy
Wow...this is such a sad story. Alex KILLED herself? Sheez...but anyway, I rather liked the idea. I was attracted to it at first because I'm half-Chinese. I think it's great that you can turn your stress and sadness into a story (I do that too, kind of). Although I thought some parts went by too fast (and I wish you'd developed Terry, Jason, and Evan a bit more) and wanted more description for the dialogue, I enjoyed reading this. Good job, keep writing.
Wow...this is such a sad story. Alex KILLED herself? Sheez...but anyway, I rather liked the idea. I was attracted to it at first because I'm half-Chinese. I think it's great that you can turn your stress and sadness into a story (I do that too, kind of). Although I thought some parts went by too fast (and I wish you'd developed Terry, Jason, and Evan a bit more) and wanted more description for the dialogue, I enjoyed reading this. Good job, keep writing.
1/28/2004 c5 bridgette261
heehee...you sound just like me...chinese...music lover...chinese :D whereas the character sounds like my brother. is sarah her sister? i feel like sarah...i guess...even though sarah hasn't made an appearance yet...but i'm eagerly awaiting my SAT scores...i'll bet you that I'm getting a 600...then I won't get into CTY...anyways...did you know that a seventh grader got a 1600? I was like OMG! And i personally know this kid in my grade (7th :D) who got 1350...wowness :D yea...just wanted to say that...
-Katherine
heehee...you sound just like me...chinese...music lover...chinese :D whereas the character sounds like my brother. is sarah her sister? i feel like sarah...i guess...even though sarah hasn't made an appearance yet...but i'm eagerly awaiting my SAT scores...i'll bet you that I'm getting a 600...then I won't get into CTY...anyways...did you know that a seventh grader got a 1600? I was like OMG! And i personally know this kid in my grade (7th :D) who got 1350...wowness :D yea...just wanted to say that...
-Katherine
12/12/2003 c18 Smurf10
My gosh...you sound like my chinese friend...except she's not as depressed as you...being Chinese isn't bad...it' something to be proud of. don't sweat it too much. Er...good but kinda sad story.
My gosh...you sound like my chinese friend...except she's not as depressed as you...being Chinese isn't bad...it' something to be proud of. don't sweat it too much. Er...good but kinda sad story.
12/1/2003 c18 7ku
Forget about my last criticism. Now that I've read the whole thing, it's not bad. I'd rate it 7/10.
7kuForget about my last criticism. Now that I've read the whole thing, it's not bad. I'd rate it 7/10.
12/1/2003 c11 ku
I'm up to Chapter 11 so far. It would have been better if you introduced this Evan character at the start and developed the character from there so that we know more about him. The story starts well with an argument with the mother over grades, something anyone can relate to, but then the story just goes off into girlish fantasies. I would've preferred some more tension and conflict.
I'm up to Chapter 11 so far. It would have been better if you introduced this Evan character at the start and developed the character from there so that we know more about him. The story starts well with an argument with the mother over grades, something anyone can relate to, but then the story just goes off into girlish fantasies. I would've preferred some more tension and conflict.
11/22/2003 c18 1DrenchedinWine
hi. i liked it. im chinese too, i can identify with the whole stereotypical asian parent thing. a lot of the action i felt happened too much in chunks, and too abruptly. in real life, things tend to develop and several trains of action happen simultaneously. so maybe if you interspersed the different groups (i.e. mom, dad, evan, jason problems), it would seem more realistic & real-life-ish. but other than that, it was nice. happy writing!
~drenchedinwine
1DrenchedinWinehi. i liked it. im chinese too, i can identify with the whole stereotypical asian parent thing. a lot of the action i felt happened too much in chunks, and too abruptly. in real life, things tend to develop and several trains of action happen simultaneously. so maybe if you interspersed the different groups (i.e. mom, dad, evan, jason problems), it would seem more realistic & real-life-ish. but other than that, it was nice. happy writing!
~drenchedinwine
11/13/2003 c18 Joflower
Not a great way to end it. But I guess it could be a lot worse. Much worse... great, I'm thinking about it again... It's not your story that's on my mind now, but something that happened in my personal life... worse than what Alex did to herself in this chapter...
Anyway, I love the pace in this chapter. It really reflects how she's feeling, rushed and all, though it doesn't really seem that bad. I don't see why she has the need to kill herself.
Dang it... I'm thinking about it again... I'm gonna go before I start tearing...
Anyway, good story. A little short, but that's ok.
Not a great way to end it. But I guess it could be a lot worse. Much worse... great, I'm thinking about it again... It's not your story that's on my mind now, but something that happened in my personal life... worse than what Alex did to herself in this chapter...
Anyway, I love the pace in this chapter. It really reflects how she's feeling, rushed and all, though it doesn't really seem that bad. I don't see why she has the need to kill herself.
Dang it... I'm thinking about it again... I'm gonna go before I start tearing...
Anyway, good story. A little short, but that's ok.
11/12/2003 c18 10talesoftrepidation
Hm, I hope that this is not implying that you are thinking of doing the same thing...i do like the length of this chapter, though. it's clipped, confused, but fast. it makes it flow better because this is how i'd be thinking if i were in her situation-scared, confused, unorganized-and it gives it a nice feel of reality. how chilling. it'd be really interesting if you showed the aftermath, but i know that it won't work cuz she's the main character and now she's dead...ah, the ruining factors of first person! well, good ending...
10talesoftrepidationHm, I hope that this is not implying that you are thinking of doing the same thing...i do like the length of this chapter, though. it's clipped, confused, but fast. it makes it flow better because this is how i'd be thinking if i were in her situation-scared, confused, unorganized-and it gives it a nice feel of reality. how chilling. it'd be really interesting if you showed the aftermath, but i know that it won't work cuz she's the main character and now she's dead...ah, the ruining factors of first person! well, good ending...