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5/2/2014 c1 Guest
Wow this is really good. Its fluent and beautiful. It tells a story without telling too much. I love that u made tge main charachter kinda powerless. Its different than what im use to with lesbians being dykes and overly aggresive. Glad u wrote what lesbians are REALLY like. Thumbs up -Jade
7/22/2009 c1 May Elizabeth
This is really good, but there is a typo "exiting" should be "exciting".
11/6/2006 c1 anich
beautiful and sweet

good day

anich
7/27/2006 c1 2Novaya Model
I totally loved this! I know the feelings you describe, because I'm lesbian. And I just loved the bit about that you were Alice and she your Wonderland.I also like the rhyming from your poem. I write myself, but mine only rhyme by accident...

I guess you live in GB or USA or somewhere else where English is spoken... If you were living in Germany I'd really like to meet you... You seem to have read my mind ;)

Well, go on with writing such wonderful things!
1/14/2005 c1 20Nanners
Aw, this is cute. A few of the rhymes seemed a bit awkward, but it wasn't really a big deal-it was better then a lot of rhyming poems I've seen.

Keep up the good work! ^_^
8/13/2004 c1 20Ariel S
Aww...This was a very sweet poem. I like to read poems with a plot, though I hate writing them. Maybe I'll try once more though. Anyway, the rythm was smooth and it all fit together.
7/28/2004 c1 5Daughter Of Liberty
I like it! It has a cute little song/rhyme scheme. I like the story behind it too.
2/10/2004 c1 11Edward Brokenpipe
Hehe I like it, a little bit too fast, but still very warm and fuzzy.
By the way nice meter, not that I know what one is, just that I see the difference in the flow of the poem and appreciate it.
Overall it's nicely original, but a little short so what better review can one recieve, but to be told to write more?
9/11/2003 c1 libras
Nice. short and sweet (yea that was a stupid pun in reference to the title). But the sex seemed kind of sudden to me.
8/23/2003 c1 119AntiPleasure
AW ^-^ way too cute! I love how you used a little story in this, so romantic well done!

*Jenna*
7/27/2003 c1 Aries Jordan
My one concern is that it doesn't flow very well but other then that I like it.
7/22/2003 c1 28Gir Garcia
wow...i just wish life could b so easy...but no *sighs*. well nice poem.

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