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7/29/2003 c1 Mallory
Good rhythm, good poem. Job well done.
7/26/2003 c1 98hurtmushroom
This one is beautiful, although sad. Great use of repetition and a great imagery, too. I loved the last stanza, really makes you think. Wonderfully done!

cio, hoellenwauwau
7/22/2003 c1 1vegantrokk
that was a sad but strong poem ::thumbs up::

you really did a nice job here.
7/22/2003 c1 47i was a postcard
interesting. i really liked until you said "And then mine broke". that phrase, that idea of, "my heart was broken" adds a spin to the poem and leads it from unique to trite. after that, the last paragraph, it as really good. but that line...if you could come up with a way, ANY way, to phrase that without saying it broke, i think you'd sound so much more original. :)
7/22/2003 c1 612simpleplan13
I like all the metaphoric stuff... like limping footsteps... rib-cage cloak... its a good poem... but it has a hopeful ending...
7/22/2003 c1 Glastonbury
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this. Loved it loved it loved it. Well done and congrats of the fullest and highest form.

Well done and bravo.

Glastonbury x
7/22/2003 c1 KristyGrace19
O... different. Nice work - I like the mood.

-Kris
7/22/2003 c1 Meaghan
Hmm, interesting.

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