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10/21/2003 c1 orangefreak33
Morbid, yes. But not a bad morbid...

I don't know what I'm talking about.

Hers was the heart 'neath the floorboards

That beat soundless rhythms in the dark

-reminds me of the telltale heart.
8/9/2003 c1 56CaitSpain
Oh, I liked that very much. It would make a delightful series of songs! ^^ I especially loved verse V, the whole thing about the piano. Anything musical always strikes a chord deep within me. ;)

As for my poem, Tetris Life, it was indeed meant to be metaphorical. I read it again a few weeks ago and only then realized how morbid and suicidal it sounded.

Anyway, this is supposed to be a review of your poem, and I will leave off saying I liked it very much and that you should keep writing! ^^
7/25/2003 c1 anon63
Pretty good. The 'tween and 'neath's bothered me but i can't really explain why... "Hers was the heart 'neath the floorboards

That beat soundless rhythms in the dark" that REALLY reminded me of 'The TellTale Heart' is you've ever read it.
7/25/2003 c1 illuzion
beautiful. eloquently written.

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