for Ay Caramba!9/13/2005 c3 enjee
You've contrasted differences between the characters very well, each having their own ranking in the social ladder! You should really update soon so we readers can read the rest of the story! =)
You've contrasted differences between the characters very well, each having their own ranking in the social ladder! You should really update soon so we readers can read the rest of the story! =)
9/13/2005 c2 enjee
Sweet chapter! They seem to have a lot in common.. I hope Keiran stands up for himself as he develops in the story. ~mimi.
Sweet chapter! They seem to have a lot in common.. I hope Keiran stands up for himself as he develops in the story. ~mimi.
9/13/2005 c1 enjee
Interesting introduction..very funny as well. I like that kindy kid example, I couldn't help laughing out loud. =D
Interesting introduction..very funny as well. I like that kindy kid example, I couldn't help laughing out loud. =D
5/8/2005 c3 thefuturejessicarabbit
keep writing!
keep writing!
3/31/2005 c3 C. Regeling
i like it, keep going ... i dont have any critis ... but i really like the story so keep it up!
Update soon
Jorja : )
i like it, keep going ... i dont have any critis ... but i really like the story so keep it up!
Update soon
Jorja : )
11/28/2003 c3 
6summercutie
Really good job! please update soon! If, u haven't noticed i've reviewed a lot of ur stories cuz im just looking at ur page thingy. Anyway great stories so far :)
6summercutieReally good job! please update soon! If, u haven't noticed i've reviewed a lot of ur stories cuz im just looking at ur page thingy. Anyway great stories so far :)
8/15/2003 c3 khaotiik
o, nadine sounds so evil, yet human. good work on this chapter, i like this fic second best after your aphaya one!
o, nadine sounds so evil, yet human. good work on this chapter, i like this fic second best after your aphaya one!
8/11/2003 c2 23comtesssorelli
Aw! I wish real life could work out, like I hope it will for the characters. Sad how I can relate. This story is very realistic and enjoyable and I hope it continues.
23comtesssorelliAw! I wish real life could work out, like I hope it will for the characters. Sad how I can relate. This story is very realistic and enjoyable and I hope it continues.
7/28/2003 c1 5catviolist
well, besides the fact that i'll be miserable until there's more ;) i love it! I really like the laid back personal style of it. There no pretentions. The part about seeing the bus at the bus sitting comfortably doesn't really go with missing the bus...mabye a different adj. to describe the bus at the end of the street? To me that was the only rough spot. I can't wait to read more!
5catviolistwell, besides the fact that i'll be miserable until there's more ;) i love it! I really like the laid back personal style of it. There no pretentions. The part about seeing the bus at the bus sitting comfortably doesn't really go with missing the bus...mabye a different adj. to describe the bus at the end of the street? To me that was the only rough spot. I can't wait to read more!
7/28/2003 c1 Sunburst Angel
I like the idea for the story. It's a very original and very good story. The part in the beginning before the dream confused me a little, though. Please keep writing.
I like the idea for the story. It's a very original and very good story. The part in the beginning before the dream confused me a little, though. Please keep writing.