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8/5/2003 c1 36Amrun
I like the meaning behind it, but your grammar is atrocious and it doesn't quite flow as nicely as it could with a bit of touch-up. Overall, though I liked it!
7/29/2003 c1 3Subliminal Ambulence
I love how straitforward this is. I also love the formatting. My only critacism is that you used blushing furiously twice...maybe "still blushing"? But who am I to talk? your poem kicks ass.
7/29/2003 c1 4SydneyKate
Wow, could you be anymore depressing. It's a very good poem. I think this poem must be about school or something because of the talking about hallways, reading books, and laughing , and minions following you and stuff. Sounds like how school use to be. Anyway. Write more soon.
7/28/2003 c1 JORDAN
JESSI I LOVE THIS ONE ITS DEEP I LOVE IT!YOU GO GIRL! :huggle*ness:

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