for Gone12/27/2004 c1 
285KittenX
Felt it, been there! Flow is gorgeous, the sentiments and words are pure and simple here and very relatable. Line breakdown is very effective too.
285KittenXFelt it, been there! Flow is gorgeous, the sentiments and words are pure and simple here and very relatable. Line breakdown is very effective too.
9/1/2003 c1 11The Lady Assassin
I like! When I was a child, I moved around a whole lot, too. I remember feeling like that. Your words portray the feeling well.
11The Lady AssassinI like! When I was a child, I moved around a whole lot, too. I remember feeling like that. Your words portray the feeling well.
7/31/2003 c1 9Magentian
*tearing up* Damn! Why does this have to be so true! Every time I go into a clothes store, I see this horrible gaudy-print crap and think, "Only Mari would look good in something like this." And then I get all sad. The same thing happens in the mall... in front of the vending machines... at Gablers... man... I miss drifting around and talking! I miss everything we used to go to and do together! I miss... you, Maria. Being around you was one of the best things life ever gave me...
Sappy reminisce-'n-miss moment now being over... let me just add one thing. The wording in this piece was beautiful... I can actually see your face and hear your voice as I read the words, so it should give you some idea. Although... 3 stanzas would sound kind of irregular if the words weren't so beautiful... as they are, I don't think you have much to worry about. Excellent job! ~hugz~
9Magentian*tearing up* Damn! Why does this have to be so true! Every time I go into a clothes store, I see this horrible gaudy-print crap and think, "Only Mari would look good in something like this." And then I get all sad. The same thing happens in the mall... in front of the vending machines... at Gablers... man... I miss drifting around and talking! I miss everything we used to go to and do together! I miss... you, Maria. Being around you was one of the best things life ever gave me...
Sappy reminisce-'n-miss moment now being over... let me just add one thing. The wording in this piece was beautiful... I can actually see your face and hear your voice as I read the words, so it should give you some idea. Although... 3 stanzas would sound kind of irregular if the words weren't so beautiful... as they are, I don't think you have much to worry about. Excellent job! ~hugz~