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12/27/2004 c1 285KittenX
Felt it, been there! Flow is gorgeous, the sentiments and words are pure and simple here and very relatable. Line breakdown is very effective too.
9/1/2003 c1 11The Lady Assassin
I like! When I was a child, I moved around a whole lot, too. I remember feeling like that. Your words portray the feeling well.
7/31/2003 c1 9Magentian
*tearing up* Damn! Why does this have to be so true! Every time I go into a clothes store, I see this horrible gaudy-print crap and think, "Only Mari would look good in something like this." And then I get all sad. The same thing happens in the mall... in front of the vending machines... at Gablers... man... I miss drifting around and talking! I miss everything we used to go to and do together! I miss... you, Maria. Being around you was one of the best things life ever gave me...

Sappy reminisce-'n-miss moment now being over... let me just add one thing. The wording in this piece was beautiful... I can actually see your face and hear your voice as I read the words, so it should give you some idea. Although... 3 stanzas would sound kind of irregular if the words weren't so beautiful... as they are, I don't think you have much to worry about. Excellent job! ~hugz~

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