for The Red Flame7/11/2012 c1 Tortillion
I like it so far!
I think the dialogue is a little forced and but your description is really good.
I have trouble with dialogue too, so that may be why I noticed haha.
Seems like good story so far. :)
I like it so far!
I think the dialogue is a little forced and but your description is really good.
I have trouble with dialogue too, so that may be why I noticed haha.
Seems like good story so far. :)
10/25/2006 c1 
1blondiexoxo
hey i just got the messeges in my email.so what exactly did u want to know? well ttyl
1blondiexoxohey i just got the messeges in my email.so what exactly did u want to know? well ttyl
8/27/2005 c4 10Hell's first Icicle
um...update soon? yea, i love this story too! there's sumthing relli nice about all ur stories that's relli addictive. yupyupz...moving on to ur nxt story now...
10Hell's first Icicleum...update soon? yea, i love this story too! there's sumthing relli nice about all ur stories that's relli addictive. yupyupz...moving on to ur nxt story now...
7/8/2005 c4 Screwy Lewy
sweet story but wats with the author's note your back after a long time..but u didn't update? wow thats screwy you could have just put it on top of your next chappy
sweet story but wats with the author's note your back after a long time..but u didn't update? wow thats screwy you could have just put it on top of your next chappy
7/6/2005 c4 15MolestAPeanut
Good story! Lookin' forward to a update! :)It's very intriguing so far. I love pirate stories. Good job! :)
~S.Buh Bai.
15MolestAPeanutGood story! Lookin' forward to a update! :)It's very intriguing so far. I love pirate stories. Good job! :)
~S.Buh Bai.
12/3/2003 c3 15lilitaliandragon
oh you haven't updated this in ages!
(then again, i haven't done much for my pirate story either...)
15lilitaliandragonoh you haven't updated this in ages!
(then again, i haven't done much for my pirate story either...)
11/1/2003 c3 6Onion Ring
Aye good chapter I see... This reminds me of Pirates of the Carribean i tihtnk tis jsut the whole boat kind ofthing going oin but thats okay.. you describe things well and i cant wai tto see what happens but are you still writing this? And i dont like how you use french in dialogue its A EVIL LANGUAGE! my teacher is mean and doesnt teach me it! byezz keep writing
6Onion RingAye good chapter I see... This reminds me of Pirates of the Carribean i tihtnk tis jsut the whole boat kind ofthing going oin but thats okay.. you describe things well and i cant wai tto see what happens but are you still writing this? And i dont like how you use french in dialogue its A EVIL LANGUAGE! my teacher is mean and doesnt teach me it! byezz keep writing
9/30/2003 c3 3Haute Couture
i can so imagine johnny depp as adrian. yum. eliza makes me laugh. the icon for all the blonde bimbos out there. except she's not blonde. right? *blink*
the merchant- "summoning up a bit of courage" and "roared" somehow doesnt seem to fit together very well.
i've always loved the phrase "screaming bloody murder"...literally or figuratively? phew, big words.
update soon. :)
3Haute Couturei can so imagine johnny depp as adrian. yum. eliza makes me laugh. the icon for all the blonde bimbos out there. except she's not blonde. right? *blink*
the merchant- "summoning up a bit of courage" and "roared" somehow doesnt seem to fit together very well.
i've always loved the phrase "screaming bloody murder"...literally or figuratively? phew, big words.
update soon. :)
8/28/2003 c3 dumdedumdum333
u do better with the description than most. u need to work on your vocab a bit. also i have NEVER heard of ANY woman being on a pirate ship, let alone two. keep going though i am interested
u do better with the description than most. u need to work on your vocab a bit. also i have NEVER heard of ANY woman being on a pirate ship, let alone two. keep going though i am interested
8/27/2003 c3 AltoidMonkey
Adrian's a great name for the main character.. not too common, yet not so randomly vague and obscure that it's a bitch to pronounce. I've just got two questions : how old is Pegs, and does Pegs have a crush on both the Capt. and Adrian, or just a long-time fondness for the Capt.?
Great work- I realy enjoy reading this fic and I hope you update SOON! Please! Pleasey chocolate chips!
Adrian's a great name for the main character.. not too common, yet not so randomly vague and obscure that it's a bitch to pronounce. I've just got two questions : how old is Pegs, and does Pegs have a crush on both the Capt. and Adrian, or just a long-time fondness for the Capt.?
Great work- I realy enjoy reading this fic and I hope you update SOON! Please! Pleasey chocolate chips!
8/17/2003 c3 AltoidMonkey
This story rocks! Great work...even my puppy likes it!
This story rocks! Great work...even my puppy likes it!
8/17/2003 c2 AltoidMonkey
Here's a chocolate chip-M&M cookie for ya! This is a great story...you put a lot of effort into it and it sparkles!
Here's a chocolate chip-M&M cookie for ya! This is a great story...you put a lot of effort into it and it sparkles!
8/8/2003 c3 Dodo Island
After reading this chapter, I have changed my mind about the cap'n (both Captian Bovie and the extremely Lucky Jack Sparrow)... I saw pirates of the carribean again, too. I think Captian Bovie is capable of pirtating and is responsible with is crew while Captian Sparrow has some issues with how to be a pirate and would make a MUCH better naval captian. Adrian reminds me A LOT of Will Turner/Orlando Bloom. My new story is up but I forgot to use spell check so there are A LOT of errors.
Wonderful story. I love all pirates, especially these and the ones from Pirates of the Carribean! *sighs and daydreams about being a pirate*
After reading this chapter, I have changed my mind about the cap'n (both Captian Bovie and the extremely Lucky Jack Sparrow)... I saw pirates of the carribean again, too. I think Captian Bovie is capable of pirtating and is responsible with is crew while Captian Sparrow has some issues with how to be a pirate and would make a MUCH better naval captian. Adrian reminds me A LOT of Will Turner/Orlando Bloom. My new story is up but I forgot to use spell check so there are A LOT of errors.
Wonderful story. I love all pirates, especially these and the ones from Pirates of the Carribean! *sighs and daydreams about being a pirate*