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6/22/2010 c1 75Burnin Heart
It started off really well, really enjoyed the beginning bit, but the end is a little unrealistic in terms of timing - because you build up the suspense and then it within just a few lines, it's good news. I'm asthmatic as well, but in my experience of asthma attacks - it takes quite some time to be able to go 'back to normal'. :)
8/9/2003 c1 38Shadafakup
This is pretty interestin.. Unqiue really..

Never seen anything like this.. Creative, and quite new.. Hmm, I liked it..

It was broken down quite well and the short lines added to the intensity of the piece..

Cool, this was quite well done..

I liked it..

MM, good ending..

Keep it up..

~Shadafakup
8/9/2003 c1 10Delilah
I'm not sure where this came from, but it's quite different, and creative! And original!

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