for Failures of the Time8/14/2003 c1 mibi chan
interesting poem. it makes me want to read the story that it was written for. good job! the rhythm of the poem really caught me because it flowed well. it was consistent, which is very important. it had a beginning, middle, and an end. plus, i do agree that it would make a good song. i am wondering what it would sound like. ^_^ and since it sounds like something about a revolution, even better for music. ~_^
interesting poem. it makes me want to read the story that it was written for. good job! the rhythm of the poem really caught me because it flowed well. it was consistent, which is very important. it had a beginning, middle, and an end. plus, i do agree that it would make a good song. i am wondering what it would sound like. ^_^ and since it sounds like something about a revolution, even better for music. ~_^
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