11/12/2003 c1 24Lux's Confusion
what can come out of this poem but a sort of pity, for the character, and for the self. pity in a sense that you know that it isn't what this person wants, and at the same time the conviction seems to dash the only hope of salvation. i don't know, it kind of left me wanting something more then an utter conclusion such as this. but i guess that was the idea you were trying to get across, right? well in any sense you did a fine job with your words, thoughts and feelings.

-Jasmine-

8/21/2003 c1 145dfgsfdghftgt44
That was a little harsh. I really hope you don't actually want to die. I mean, that would be so cruel to rob the world of your poetry. I think this is pretty good. Keep up the great work.

~Cirien Phoenix of the Eternal Phlame

P.S. Thanks for the review.