11/5/2005 c1 Misc
Loved it... beautifully descriptive. The only thing I didn't like was how very physically perfect they both seemed to be. I like attractive human beings, not Barbie and Ken. Aside from that, though, well-done!
Loved it... beautifully descriptive. The only thing I didn't like was how very physically perfect they both seemed to be. I like attractive human beings, not Barbie and Ken. Aside from that, though, well-done!
7/14/2004 c1 me
UH...oh baby...i'm so hot now! that was so great and descriptive, i loved it! ;-)
UH...oh baby...i'm so hot now! that was so great and descriptive, i loved it! ;-)
6/14/2004 c1 Jenny
oh...oh god... i shouldn't have read this...i'm only eight...i know, i know you warned me...don't want to think about it...i think i'm going to die...
oh...oh god... i shouldn't have read this...i'm only eight...i know, i know you warned me...don't want to think about it...i think i'm going to die...
3/10/2004 c1 Mommy
YOU no what would be real cool if he later found out that she used to are is still bi!...write more!
YOU no what would be real cool if he later found out that she used to are is still bi!...write more!
10/25/2003 c1 iSh juSt mE
that was pretty good... not the best work i've seen but still pretty good. keep it up tho, ur doin a good job!
that was pretty good... not the best work i've seen but still pretty good. keep it up tho, ur doin a good job!
8/20/2003 c1 no one
that was not nc-17. i mean, that was barely even a pg in my standards. keep writing!
that was not nc-17. i mean, that was barely even a pg in my standards. keep writing!
8/20/2003 c1 ronwrites
hey!
very descriptive. which isn't a bad thing mind you :)
i love how you managed to balance the sex and the emotions. that was cool :0
now i have to plug shamelessly :) would you mind reviewing my fic, Nazareno? you don't have to, of course, but there's no shame in begging :)
hey!
very descriptive. which isn't a bad thing mind you :)
i love how you managed to balance the sex and the emotions. that was cool :0
now i have to plug shamelessly :) would you mind reviewing my fic, Nazareno? you don't have to, of course, but there's no shame in begging :)
8/19/2003 c1 9Minnie Souris
very good and well written but where's the story? who are these people? the whle thing came from nowhere & is going nowhere. You need some story to help it along, unless it was supposed to be like something from a porn magazine.
very good and well written but where's the story? who are these people? the whle thing came from nowhere & is going nowhere. You need some story to help it along, unless it was supposed to be like something from a porn magazine.
8/18/2003 c1 Guest
that was beautiful
that was beautiful