for Obsession8/19/2003 c1 
38Shadafakup
I liked this.. It flowed well, and definitely got the message across..
Hmm, I would like to say it was simply well done up, with the flow and the rhythm set up quite nicely..
Interestin piece in my opinion and it does show the emotions..
Interestin viewpoint though the overall result can definitely be improved upon..
Not quite a bad piece, good job..
~Shadafakup
38ShadafakupI liked this.. It flowed well, and definitely got the message across..
Hmm, I would like to say it was simply well done up, with the flow and the rhythm set up quite nicely..
Interestin piece in my opinion and it does show the emotions..
Interestin viewpoint though the overall result can definitely be improved upon..
Not quite a bad piece, good job..
~Shadafakup
8/19/2003 c1 Chronicled Realms of FF.Net
Wow is a compliment at too low a level for this poem. It's really good is still too low. Make up your own and maybe that'll work. I like it.
Wow is a compliment at too low a level for this poem. It's really good is still too low. Make up your own and maybe that'll work. I like it.
8/18/2003 c1 Mutha T
Very well phrased...it invokes the helplessness one feels watching another abuse and take for granted the love of someone whose love we wish was ours...
Only criticism I have is to watch the "to/two/too" words..."hold her to tightly" should be "too"!
Kudos...Mutha T
Very well phrased...it invokes the helplessness one feels watching another abuse and take for granted the love of someone whose love we wish was ours...
Only criticism I have is to watch the "to/two/too" words..."hold her to tightly" should be "too"!
Kudos...Mutha T