for Lift A Fallen Star2/1/2009 c2 Maelne
This story is on my favorites list but I am going to take it off because, you have no updated it in a very long while. I will take it off in 2 days and not now because, I still like where this story is going and want to give you that much longer before I give up on it.
This story is on my favorites list but I am going to take it off because, you have no updated it in a very long while. I will take it off in 2 days and not now because, I still like where this story is going and want to give you that much longer before I give up on it.
1/12/2009 c1 Maelne
Why aren't you updating? I keep checking nearly every day for an update on any of your pirate stories! And you never have any of them updated! You can't have writer's block that bad.
Why aren't you updating? I keep checking nearly every day for an update on any of your pirate stories! And you never have any of them updated! You can't have writer's block that bad.
12/23/2008 c3 Maelne
finally I have an account! ^-^ Yay! anyways. . . I like that last chapter a lot. But you really need to work on adding chapters at least once every week!
finally I have an account! ^-^ Yay! anyways. . . I like that last chapter a lot. But you really need to work on adding chapters at least once every week!
12/10/2008 c3 Maelne
Whoa! Whoa! This is the best chapter I have read so far! I love it! ^-^ I can't wait to read the next one! Oh and keep up with the detail! I liked your writing in this chapter better than the first two.
Whoa! Whoa! This is the best chapter I have read so far! I love it! ^-^ I can't wait to read the next one! Oh and keep up with the detail! I liked your writing in this chapter better than the first two.
12/10/2008 c2 Maelne
Well for one, where'd she put all the feelings she had of her life being murdered? Detail woman! Detail! What do her surroundings look like and how does she take it all in?
Well for one, where'd she put all the feelings she had of her life being murdered? Detail woman! Detail! What do her surroundings look like and how does she take it all in?
12/10/2008 c1 Maelne
Ugh she's so weak...what happened up on deck? What does Star look like? You must think of all questions to be answered and fit them into the story in a way that flows.
Ugh she's so weak...what happened up on deck? What does Star look like? You must think of all questions to be answered and fit them into the story in a way that flows.
1/5/2004 c3 Grey-eyed-dream-chaser
Wow! Awesome story. I like the whole female pirate deal. I didn't really notice any grammatical or errors in the tense and for the most part, the story flowed well. There were no places where the story was so awkward that I would comment on it. I have read and written many stories myself and have taken honors English 1 and 2 in high school, and this is a very good story in my opinion. I look forward to the next chapter and when I get a chance, I will read and review your other stories. If they are as good as this one is so far, I believe I will enjoy them. Just for a suggestion, you might want to add some more danger and social mishaps in the future with Star to make the story more full.
Wow! Awesome story. I like the whole female pirate deal. I didn't really notice any grammatical or errors in the tense and for the most part, the story flowed well. There were no places where the story was so awkward that I would comment on it. I have read and written many stories myself and have taken honors English 1 and 2 in high school, and this is a very good story in my opinion. I look forward to the next chapter and when I get a chance, I will read and review your other stories. If they are as good as this one is so far, I believe I will enjoy them. Just for a suggestion, you might want to add some more danger and social mishaps in the future with Star to make the story more full.
1/3/2004 c3 Megan
sorry i haven't had a chance to review before this, but oh well. this story just keeps on getting better and better, woman! keep it up, girl. i'm glad you changed the name of the guy, too..good idea. well, update this soon..it's my favorite and you know it. miss you already, ever tho i just saw you like not even 24 hours ago, lol. ok, leaving now.
sorry i haven't had a chance to review before this, but oh well. this story just keeps on getting better and better, woman! keep it up, girl. i'm glad you changed the name of the guy, too..good idea. well, update this soon..it's my favorite and you know it. miss you already, ever tho i just saw you like not even 24 hours ago, lol. ok, leaving now.
12/31/2003 c3 
6georgie b
oh! am so into the story rite now...dont leave me hanging like this. i expect the next chapter soon!
the pace is really good since u have kept it going...as so the readers wldn't fall asleep on desks. i really enjoy the conversations, there's a lot of fire behind star's dialogue...her being a gorgeous goddess and all eh?
i dont think u shld have made her beauty so obvious...i mean it's v. cliche to have a goddess of a main character. i dont mean that ur star shld be an ugly toad that shld never be allow to see the light of day but perhaps be a bit subtle at showing how pretty she it both on the inside and out. hehe, i guess it shld go for all characters: dont catagorize them as a particular type of personality right away by saying he's kind or arrogant...instead let that seep thro the story so the readers can figure it out themselves.
rite i think it cld also be better if u were to put a little mystery behind it...like storytelling with bits of missing pieces that wld eventually lead to the twist.
beautifully written otherwise, lovely descriptions especially the part where star saw thro the geoffrey guy. cant wait till the next chappie...and sorry if i blab too much.
6georgie boh! am so into the story rite now...dont leave me hanging like this. i expect the next chapter soon!
the pace is really good since u have kept it going...as so the readers wldn't fall asleep on desks. i really enjoy the conversations, there's a lot of fire behind star's dialogue...her being a gorgeous goddess and all eh?
i dont think u shld have made her beauty so obvious...i mean it's v. cliche to have a goddess of a main character. i dont mean that ur star shld be an ugly toad that shld never be allow to see the light of day but perhaps be a bit subtle at showing how pretty she it both on the inside and out. hehe, i guess it shld go for all characters: dont catagorize them as a particular type of personality right away by saying he's kind or arrogant...instead let that seep thro the story so the readers can figure it out themselves.
rite i think it cld also be better if u were to put a little mystery behind it...like storytelling with bits of missing pieces that wld eventually lead to the twist.
beautifully written otherwise, lovely descriptions especially the part where star saw thro the geoffrey guy. cant wait till the next chappie...and sorry if i blab too much.
12/23/2003 c3 32Shadowz the Silver Wolf
Very nice! One thing tho, you should try and work on describing your setting a bit more, otherwise it is a really good story. I thoughrly enjoyed it ^_^
32Shadowz the Silver WolfVery nice! One thing tho, you should try and work on describing your setting a bit more, otherwise it is a really good story. I thoughrly enjoyed it ^_^
12/19/2003 c3 12icytigerwarrior
This is really good. You should keep writing more. Can't wait to read what comes next!
12icytigerwarriorThis is really good. You should keep writing more. Can't wait to read what comes next!
12/16/2003 c3 4Plateado
Not too bad. I think you could have moved the story at a slower pace, but it's fairly good otherwise. Good job!
Thanks for your comments on my story! I appreciate the feedback.
-Riley
4PlateadoNot too bad. I think you could have moved the story at a slower pace, but it's fairly good otherwise. Good job!
Thanks for your comments on my story! I appreciate the feedback.
-Riley
12/7/2003 c3 Peg Pannery
Hey! I think perhaps you should do a little bit of studying on that period of history. It doesn't seem quite...authentic.
Hey! I think perhaps you should do a little bit of studying on that period of history. It doesn't seem quite...authentic.
12/5/2003 c3 Penny
Ohh this is good! I like this story!
Ohh this is good! I like this story!
12/4/2003 c3 10talesoftrepidation
GAH!
okay, i really liked the inside scoop on all of this. i needed to hear her say all of that stuff about those mean english people (no offense to english people at all, you're all super cool, but i'm sympathizing with the main character and in this story, the english are sure mean). moving.
again makes me think of "pirates of the caribbean" though cuz of the corset that quite nearly makes her pass out. just a quick quesiton-how does she run with the corset? i was just curious...dont' think i'm trying to make fun of you.
i hope there's inside scoop on andy too (nice name, by the way) in letters or something. i hope they meet again SOON cuz she needs to talk with some nice people again. nice towards pirates i mean. well, WRITE WRITE WRITE and POST POST POST!
10talesoftrepidationGAH!
okay, i really liked the inside scoop on all of this. i needed to hear her say all of that stuff about those mean english people (no offense to english people at all, you're all super cool, but i'm sympathizing with the main character and in this story, the english are sure mean). moving.
again makes me think of "pirates of the caribbean" though cuz of the corset that quite nearly makes her pass out. just a quick quesiton-how does she run with the corset? i was just curious...dont' think i'm trying to make fun of you.
i hope there's inside scoop on andy too (nice name, by the way) in letters or something. i hope they meet again SOON cuz she needs to talk with some nice people again. nice towards pirates i mean. well, WRITE WRITE WRITE and POST POST POST!