for The Vampire Conjurer4/24/2005 c1 
3greMlin72
omg! i wrote like that! pheh! i sucked! meh i'll prolly look back at my work later and drop dead at the sight of the english.
3greMlin72omg! i wrote like that! pheh! i sucked! meh i'll prolly look back at my work later and drop dead at the sight of the english.
12/6/2003 c21 8Icefire2
Ok. Tess got herself into to trouble AGAIN! But who is this Lord Tullman, what does he want with Tess and where is he taking her?
8Icefire2Ok. Tess got herself into to trouble AGAIN! But who is this Lord Tullman, what does he want with Tess and where is he taking her?
11/29/2003 c2 A. Taylor
Yes, I am back. ^^ I am terribly slow at this. Lots of homework, though. I just finished reading this chapter. I feel sorry for poor Tess. She's going through quite a lot. The only way I think you could improve this is by making more paragraphs. At the beginning of the chapter, when three people were talking, it was hard to understand what was speaking. Other than that, it was pretty good.
Yes, I am back. ^^ I am terribly slow at this. Lots of homework, though. I just finished reading this chapter. I feel sorry for poor Tess. She's going through quite a lot. The only way I think you could improve this is by making more paragraphs. At the beginning of the chapter, when three people were talking, it was hard to understand what was speaking. Other than that, it was pretty good.
11/18/2003 c21 67secluded existence
Yes! SO cool! I dont know what to say, really! Just keep writing! Oh, and I notice u have a new story so I must get on to reading that soon. But until then write!
67secluded existenceYes! SO cool! I dont know what to say, really! Just keep writing! Oh, and I notice u have a new story so I must get on to reading that soon. But until then write!
11/13/2003 c1 A. Taylor
Hello there my nice reviewer. ^^; I thought I'd check out one of your stories. I like this chapter. Poor Tess. I feel sorry for her. Well, I'd make this longer, but I have to go. Stupid reason. -_-' But I'll be back, and review YOUR story chapter by chapter. Muahaha...-cough- Well, bye. And thanks. ^^
~Lona Amaris
Hello there my nice reviewer. ^^; I thought I'd check out one of your stories. I like this chapter. Poor Tess. I feel sorry for her. Well, I'd make this longer, but I have to go. Stupid reason. -_-' But I'll be back, and review YOUR story chapter by chapter. Muahaha...-cough- Well, bye. And thanks. ^^
~Lona Amaris
11/5/2003 c20 67secluded existence
oh my gosh! i love it! oh yes! this is such a great story! just... cool! im so glad u're still writing it...
oh and thanks for the avid review!
WRITE MORE
67secluded existenceoh my gosh! i love it! oh yes! this is such a great story! just... cool! im so glad u're still writing it...
oh and thanks for the avid review!
WRITE MORE
10/26/2003 c18 secluded existence
yes yes yes! yur adding more! this is so great! a much differnt ending! happy endings are so dull finally there is an evil one!
yes yes yes! yur adding more! this is so great! a much differnt ending! happy endings are so dull finally there is an evil one!
10/21/2003 c5 29James Li
OKAy well i read up 2 ch 5. and theres some stuff i want 2 point out 2 u... in ch. 1 "He revealed to white fangs.."
u should change it to "the white fangs"\
and the most important thing have to say is that.. u should develop the plot more.. i think u rushed alot of it.. like i mean the story kinda went too fast... so u might want to go bac and develop the plot more... it will make u'r story much much better.. good job tho! (write me bac=D)
29James LiOKAy well i read up 2 ch 5. and theres some stuff i want 2 point out 2 u... in ch. 1 "He revealed to white fangs.."
u should change it to "the white fangs"\
and the most important thing have to say is that.. u should develop the plot more.. i think u rushed alot of it.. like i mean the story kinda went too fast... so u might want to go bac and develop the plot more... it will make u'r story much much better.. good job tho! (write me bac=D)
10/4/2003 c19 67secluded existence
OH MY GOSH! THAT WAS SOO O O O O O O O O O O O O O O O OO O O O O O OO O O O GOOD! I JUST FINISHED READING ALL OF IT! IT WAS GREAT! AWESOME! BUT. .. . . . . . . .MORE! I'LL BE SURE TO READ THE OTHER ONE YUR STARTING, I HOPE ITS AS GOOD AS THIS ONE!
67secluded existenceOH MY GOSH! THAT WAS SOO O O O O O O O O O O O O O O O OO O O O O O OO O O O GOOD! I JUST FINISHED READING ALL OF IT! IT WAS GREAT! AWESOME! BUT. .. . . . . . . .MORE! I'LL BE SURE TO READ THE OTHER ONE YUR STARTING, I HOPE ITS AS GOOD AS THIS ONE!
9/26/2003 c19 7Blankppr
I really liked this story and, even though the ending was wierd, it's a pretty good ending. ^_^
7BlankpprI really liked this story and, even though the ending was wierd, it's a pretty good ending. ^_^
9/26/2003 c3 Blankppr
All for this chapter... Calling both Tess and Norrel she gets a little bit confusing... all you have to do really is replace one of the she's not all of them...
All for this chapter... Calling both Tess and Norrel she gets a little bit confusing... all you have to do really is replace one of the she's not all of them...
9/26/2003 c2 Blankppr
So far... it's good. I only see two problems. (1) When did she find out that if she won she would be a conjurer? (2)Murphy's Law? Maybe you should explain it at the end. I didn't know what it was and had to look it up. That's all! Other then that, I think it's good!
So far... it's good. I only see two problems. (1) When did she find out that if she won she would be a conjurer? (2)Murphy's Law? Maybe you should explain it at the end. I didn't know what it was and had to look it up. That's all! Other then that, I think it's good!