for A Darker Shade of Red7/14/2006 c1 Knightley
i recognized the midsummer night's dream part. does that count as poetry? it rhymes, no?
i recognized the midsummer night's dream part. does that count as poetry? it rhymes, no?
11/27/2005 c1 
34Rusty And The Rubix Horse
This is an excellent little piece! I especially liked your descriptions of the characters-I can totally picture them...half of my school fits the descriptions. Nice job.
34Rusty And The Rubix HorseThis is an excellent little piece! I especially liked your descriptions of the characters-I can totally picture them...half of my school fits the descriptions. Nice job.
7/12/2005 c1 1l'orage d'absinthe
that was absolutely gorgeous. I wish I could write so well. I'm not sure what to call this, it feels like poetry, yet it looks like prose. Either way, it's very well done.
1l'orage d'absinthethat was absolutely gorgeous. I wish I could write so well. I'm not sure what to call this, it feels like poetry, yet it looks like prose. Either way, it's very well done.
4/16/2005 c1 8Love Me CrayziE
a darker shade of red...cause a long night means a fist fight? are we qouting lyrics here? ...anyhow, you should read franny and zooey by j.d salinger. you might like it.
8Love Me CrayziEa darker shade of red...cause a long night means a fist fight? are we qouting lyrics here? ...anyhow, you should read franny and zooey by j.d salinger. you might like it.
1/4/2005 c1 7Unbirthday
I love your lyrical poem. What I like about it especially is that the tone and voice don't sound fake, and it's really you talking. I guess that sounds weird, but sometimes when people write poetry they adopt another voice, and the poem sounds fake. Hehe, I seem to be describing me. Some of my favorite lines, or rather sections, was in the beginning in "the tentacles of an octopus on mushrooms. We loved her. She radiated security in black eyeliner and tai chi lessons...Our punk rock Nefertiti; Minerva. Artemis..." And then the next part when she asked, "what the fuck is wrong with your hair?" I like how the pace speeds up, and then abruptly stops. Like how people really think. Even though it's been more than a year, I still think you should consider doing a continuation! =)
7UnbirthdayI love your lyrical poem. What I like about it especially is that the tone and voice don't sound fake, and it's really you talking. I guess that sounds weird, but sometimes when people write poetry they adopt another voice, and the poem sounds fake. Hehe, I seem to be describing me. Some of my favorite lines, or rather sections, was in the beginning in "the tentacles of an octopus on mushrooms. We loved her. She radiated security in black eyeliner and tai chi lessons...Our punk rock Nefertiti; Minerva. Artemis..." And then the next part when she asked, "what the fuck is wrong with your hair?" I like how the pace speeds up, and then abruptly stops. Like how people really think. Even though it's been more than a year, I still think you should consider doing a continuation! =)
9/26/2004 c1 do not resuscitate
this was so beautiful- how you describe Genevieve and her relationship with the narrator. this was just so well written, lovely and amazing. definitely keep going.
this was so beautiful- how you describe Genevieve and her relationship with the narrator. this was just so well written, lovely and amazing. definitely keep going.
3/22/2004 c1 37wingless
my gawd. i love this. its so beautiful. i love your wrirting style. it's mix with punk rock culture is unusual, and interesting. i love your descriptions, they are stunning. this is almost icnematic. but your sense of point of view is amazing too. i could rant on. basically this is amazing, please continue it
37winglessmy gawd. i love this. its so beautiful. i love your wrirting style. it's mix with punk rock culture is unusual, and interesting. i love your descriptions, they are stunning. this is almost icnematic. but your sense of point of view is amazing too. i could rant on. basically this is amazing, please continue it
3/1/2004 c1 21featherlight
Wow. Just-holy fuck. Wow.
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I liked the second paragraph best-all the little quirks, like her love of books and her ethnicity and her name, come together and the reader gets a better picture of who she is.
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This is-I don't know. Pretty? Amazing? Real? All of those. I like it.
21featherlightWow. Just-holy fuck. Wow.
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I liked the second paragraph best-all the little quirks, like her love of books and her ethnicity and her name, come together and the reader gets a better picture of who she is.
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This is-I don't know. Pretty? Amazing? Real? All of those. I like it.
10/19/2003 c1 25Soviet
Extreamly well done.
This is deffinatly one of the best fics I read on FP, good job. Please continue
25SovietExtreamly well done.
This is deffinatly one of the best fics I read on FP, good job. Please continue
9/22/2003 c1 17fontanellemonster
Aw...it's very definitely worth the effort of continuation! I liked the cheap punk named Jake, that made me giggle. Cheap punks named Jake with Squier Strats and green hair and saftety pins are everywhere now.
I sort of want to point out my favourite lines but I'm lame and I can't think. I like them all...OK, well my favourite paragraph was the one that started "what the fuck is wrong with your hair?" and went on to "...I just use Elmer's."
I love the way you do subtle femslashy stuff. Like um...something else you wrote...I don't remember the title. It might have been "Crimson & Clover" but wasn't that the one with Benji and Joel (wow I'm going to see them two nights in a row because two different friends are dragging me along...)? You're cool. Like banana & vinegar milkshake or something.
17fontanellemonsterAw...it's very definitely worth the effort of continuation! I liked the cheap punk named Jake, that made me giggle. Cheap punks named Jake with Squier Strats and green hair and saftety pins are everywhere now.
I sort of want to point out my favourite lines but I'm lame and I can't think. I like them all...OK, well my favourite paragraph was the one that started "what the fuck is wrong with your hair?" and went on to "...I just use Elmer's."
I love the way you do subtle femslashy stuff. Like um...something else you wrote...I don't remember the title. It might have been "Crimson & Clover" but wasn't that the one with Benji and Joel (wow I'm going to see them two nights in a row because two different friends are dragging me along...)? You're cool. Like banana & vinegar milkshake or something.
9/21/2003 c1 anon63
I'm with romancingthemoon. You are the anti-fake. You are the queen. Of everything.
I'm with romancingthemoon. You are the anti-fake. You are the queen. Of everything.
9/11/2003 c1 romancingthemoon
wow...just...wow...
the more i read you the more i like you. you are the anti-fake.
wow...just...wow...
the more i read you the more i like you. you are the anti-fake.