
11/6/2003 c1 Phoenix
that one needs work, it doesn't flow as well as the rest of your work does. if you add or change anything either it be the title or more stuff about the face behind the mask. this, i am sad to say is a flame, but this particular work did not strike my fancy, despite my being easliy amused. it appealed to my attention span of a gnat *what was that, i'm coming to get you Bear* rather than my swallowing any thing. sorry.
that one needs work, it doesn't flow as well as the rest of your work does. if you add or change anything either it be the title or more stuff about the face behind the mask. this, i am sad to say is a flame, but this particular work did not strike my fancy, despite my being easliy amused. it appealed to my attention span of a gnat *what was that, i'm coming to get you Bear* rather than my swallowing any thing. sorry.
8/25/2003 c1
3heavilymedicated
I see nothing wrong with your title. It suits the poem's subject quite nicely. And I would like to say that you are not quite as inept as I when it comes to poetry! If you don't believe me (which you really should just take my word for it) you can read my intro to Legend of the Ragnoki. Perfect example right there!
Anyway, I liked this. I like pretty much everything that you write. ^_^
~Toni
LadyIsilmir

I see nothing wrong with your title. It suits the poem's subject quite nicely. And I would like to say that you are not quite as inept as I when it comes to poetry! If you don't believe me (which you really should just take my word for it) you can read my intro to Legend of the Ragnoki. Perfect example right there!
Anyway, I liked this. I like pretty much everything that you write. ^_^
~Toni
LadyIsilmir
8/24/2003 c1 ShadowSilver
I don't think there's anything wrong with the title or the poem. ^ ^ I luff this poem! Tis so cool! W00t! ^-^
I don't think there's anything wrong with the title or the poem. ^ ^ I luff this poem! Tis so cool! W00t! ^-^