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8/30/2003 c1 3glitzydancingshoes
That was really well written. The poem was good too. Update soon
8/28/2003 c1 1Sweetvenom1
This is SO UNBELIEVABLY GOOD! The plot seems excellent and I loved the poem. Please update soon!
8/26/2003 c1 Kitsune no Alz
This was a beautiful story. The imagery was quite striking-the "frantic" colors and the whiteness of Felakese mourning. I also like the way you didn't go out of your way to explain everything in unnecessary detail, like delving deeply into the place's history, or Musouka's past. The hinting around the edges of it and practical tale-telling furthers the impact of the piece: it's something that's already happened. The poetry at the end also enhances the story.

And although my personal taste is for stories written in the past tense, I find that this story works best in present because of the nature of waiting implicit within it. You have not stumbled over your tenses and stay consistently in present tense, for which I applaud you.

Anyway, 'twas a lovely, angsty story.

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