for Unexpected11/22/2003 c4 
20ReflectiveVoice
Misty-
I was immediately entranced by this story, and eagerly read each chapter. I could relate to the domineering father and submissive mother, and the talented child so eager to please his parents. The story really centers around the father as the main subject...the only questionable comment I would give, is that the ending does not seem to fully embrace all the emotions the father feels. It only shows how selfish he still is, even after his child's tragedy of losing his hearing. Does the father only feel loss because his son's career is ruined? Does he feel nothing for the boy other than his ability to become a great concert pianist? It seems, the father might learn something from this experience about himself, and this could be expressed clearer?
I really enjoy your writing style, and your ability to set up character descriptions. The personalities of the characters are clearly understood.
20ReflectiveVoiceMisty-
I was immediately entranced by this story, and eagerly read each chapter. I could relate to the domineering father and submissive mother, and the talented child so eager to please his parents. The story really centers around the father as the main subject...the only questionable comment I would give, is that the ending does not seem to fully embrace all the emotions the father feels. It only shows how selfish he still is, even after his child's tragedy of losing his hearing. Does the father only feel loss because his son's career is ruined? Does he feel nothing for the boy other than his ability to become a great concert pianist? It seems, the father might learn something from this experience about himself, and this could be expressed clearer?
I really enjoy your writing style, and your ability to set up character descriptions. The personalities of the characters are clearly understood.
9/24/2003 c1 amicusveritas
I began a review and then had to reboot, so it is possible you may have a duplicate...an excellent opening chapter to your story...I was a little worried about the grouchy mama and the little boy..but that resolved itself...your own interest in music shows through the story very well and you have a gentle touch with your characters...I look forward to more chapters...by the way, are you familiar with Rachmaninoff's Variations on a Theme of Paganini, Opus 51...just the melody toward the end...it was used in a film called, Somewhere in Time, with Jane Seymour and Christopher Reeves...but has been my most favorite classical piece for many years...thank you for posting your work...regards...amicus
I began a review and then had to reboot, so it is possible you may have a duplicate...an excellent opening chapter to your story...I was a little worried about the grouchy mama and the little boy..but that resolved itself...your own interest in music shows through the story very well and you have a gentle touch with your characters...I look forward to more chapters...by the way, are you familiar with Rachmaninoff's Variations on a Theme of Paganini, Opus 51...just the melody toward the end...it was used in a film called, Somewhere in Time, with Jane Seymour and Christopher Reeves...but has been my most favorite classical piece for many years...thank you for posting your work...regards...amicus
9/23/2003 c4 17Bob n Kazzi
Woah. That was awesome. It should have been longer, but that was fantastic.
17Bob n KazziWoah. That was awesome. It should have been longer, but that was fantastic.