for Requiem10/28/2003 c1 
28JaphyRider
I adore this one. The language you use is perfectly done. The only thing I would suggest is in the sentance; "With too little time to find them" use a word other than too. It doesn't seem to fit with the rest of the poem.
But otherwise, it's awesome.
28JaphyRiderI adore this one. The language you use is perfectly done. The only thing I would suggest is in the sentance; "With too little time to find them" use a word other than too. It doesn't seem to fit with the rest of the poem.
But otherwise, it's awesome.
10/5/2003 c1 9Azusasan
o_O! That's so purty! ...I wish I could write poetry like you... ;-; ::Claps::
9Azusasano_O! That's so purty! ...I wish I could write poetry like you... ;-; ::Claps::
10/4/2003 c1 10DrunkenMonkeyKing
Wow, that was a great poem! Awesome imagery and just kick ass in general. In case you don't recognize my name, I'm the guy that's Smoke in Belle's Spirit Guardians. I like your character in there, and I was wondering if I could put her and Sandu in this little prequel thing I'm writing? It wouldn't pop up for awhile, so go ahead and think about, if you want. Anyway, again, that was a spectacular poem.
10DrunkenMonkeyKingWow, that was a great poem! Awesome imagery and just kick ass in general. In case you don't recognize my name, I'm the guy that's Smoke in Belle's Spirit Guardians. I like your character in there, and I was wondering if I could put her and Sandu in this little prequel thing I'm writing? It wouldn't pop up for awhile, so go ahead and think about, if you want. Anyway, again, that was a spectacular poem.
9/19/2003 c1 21Miamouse
I really like this... it's got a weird rolling quality and poetry with any sort of dialogue is always good for me!
I especially like the lat stanza, lovely ending.
Mia
21MiamouseI really like this... it's got a weird rolling quality and poetry with any sort of dialogue is always good for me!
I especially like the lat stanza, lovely ending.
Mia
9/16/2003 c1 1aleppine
Something about the word 'requiem' just lures me more than is healthy.
I really like this, it seems like one of those moments that aren't movie perfect and poetry-smooth when they happen, but you always remember them as something that flows that way.
'... he told me while holding
is breath, waiting for a miracle.'
'... about filling my room with butterflies ...'
Yeah ... I pick the weird bits ... but they especially grabbed me.
Great to be back reading you again. I need to get back to that fic of yours ... :D ciao ciao
1aleppineSomething about the word 'requiem' just lures me more than is healthy.
I really like this, it seems like one of those moments that aren't movie perfect and poetry-smooth when they happen, but you always remember them as something that flows that way.
'... he told me while holding
is breath, waiting for a miracle.'
'... about filling my room with butterflies ...'
Yeah ... I pick the weird bits ... but they especially grabbed me.
Great to be back reading you again. I need to get back to that fic of yours ... :D ciao ciao
9/10/2003 c1 6Belle the Shadow-Cat
How am I supposed to critique when i have nothing to critique. THe poem was wonderful especially these lines:
The breeze, it echoes
Stars and ancient things
Waiting to be discovered
With too little time to find them
Awsome, sounds really magestic and magical. Sure i'd like to see a picture of Vanda, you draw very well. (I saw your site) coincidentally i'm on there too, since a few days ago. (Belle55) i'm not the best of drawers.
Anyway, awsome poem and thanks for reviewing.
-Belle the Shadow-Cat
p.s: No, it's not a love thing between Calantha and Eldon, think of it as a 'Brother, Sister" relationship. That's what Silverfire Starr specified.
6Belle the Shadow-CatHow am I supposed to critique when i have nothing to critique. THe poem was wonderful especially these lines:
The breeze, it echoes
Stars and ancient things
Waiting to be discovered
With too little time to find them
Awsome, sounds really magestic and magical. Sure i'd like to see a picture of Vanda, you draw very well. (I saw your site) coincidentally i'm on there too, since a few days ago. (Belle55) i'm not the best of drawers.
Anyway, awsome poem and thanks for reviewing.
-Belle the Shadow-Cat
p.s: No, it's not a love thing between Calantha and Eldon, think of it as a 'Brother, Sister" relationship. That's what Silverfire Starr specified.