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2/8/2004 c1 Hera
This one is simple but it has a good beat.
11/17/2003 c1 42Ian Shweltser
Hi me again nice poem.I liked the way you used the oppisites.But what you should be careful about is that the syllables are right. once again great work.

P.S. go onto my Bio and I've got my new poem on that. Please go
11/2/2003 c1 me10
wow your flow of words is awesome! and this poem rhymes beautifully, you've described this well and clearly-great work.
10/12/2003 c1 Louise
Jesus, Lisa, must you be so talented?
9/25/2003 c1 nolongerhere357
Very good for only three rhyming couplets! But conflict in poetry can work miracles, and this one is full of contradiction.

("You" seems quite sadistic by laughing at "I"'s sadness and smiling at "I"'s outbursts. I think "You" needs to go. ::grin::)
9/24/2003 c1 31Lisa Monroe
this is very true...most people don't realize that sometimes when you love someone you can also hate the, just as much...you've conveyed the emotion beautifully
9/13/2003 c1 6SosomenosDiaTheos
Nice poem. I think you did a good job of expressing the frustrations many people go through in life.
9/12/2003 c1 6finding sanity
very cute.. i like this alot
9/8/2003 c1 15NiennaAlatariel
This has really good rythm, and I like what it says..cool poem!
9/8/2003 c1 10fizzysweet
this poem ix excellent...its beyond good or excellent...the rhymes r excellent n fit perfectly...this doesnt sound like a forced poem at all..i love it..pls keep writing.. n very very very good job...
9/8/2003 c1 38Lex C
lol the last four lines are funny. Short and sweet, very cool.

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