for Falling After You11/9/2010 c1 
2MurtaghSonOfMorzan
I love it! It would be great to hear but those lyrics are awesomeness! :)
2MurtaghSonOfMorzanI love it! It would be great to hear but those lyrics are awesomeness! :)
3/20/2010 c1 Moony08
I can hear this in my head, with ... an acoustic guitar... and it has a smooth way of going... Its great, man.
I can hear this in my head, with ... an acoustic guitar... and it has a smooth way of going... Its great, man.
6/4/2007 c1 the first to fall
this is your first song? its really good. i could hear a tune to go with the words in my head. you have a really good song. you should try to publish it.
this is your first song? its really good. i could hear a tune to go with the words in my head. you have a really good song. you should try to publish it.
8/1/2006 c1 22Starleaf
Wow! I love this, I can definitely see it as one of those slow rock songs that pick up the pace halfway down. But if you have a different idea for what it would be like, I think it could be great either way. I like the fact that it makes sense, unlike those songs that have a lot of great imagery, but they just don't seem to add together. Anyway, thanks a lot for your review. I'm glad you liked the story, and to tell the truth I was thinking of continuing it, but I don't think I'll be doing that for a while. Keep writing! :)
22StarleafWow! I love this, I can definitely see it as one of those slow rock songs that pick up the pace halfway down. But if you have a different idea for what it would be like, I think it could be great either way. I like the fact that it makes sense, unlike those songs that have a lot of great imagery, but they just don't seem to add together. Anyway, thanks a lot for your review. I'm glad you liked the story, and to tell the truth I was thinking of continuing it, but I don't think I'll be doing that for a while. Keep writing! :)
5/5/2006 c1 Bane of Humanity
Hey
I just wanted to say that I stumbled across this, as one does with most things... and it touched me. Reminds me of a time long ago..
Its very well written. Erm.. Thats all I wanted to say..
*waves* Later
Hey
I just wanted to say that I stumbled across this, as one does with most things... and it touched me. Reminds me of a time long ago..
Its very well written. Erm.. Thats all I wanted to say..
*waves* Later
2/16/2005 c1 3Sean Taylor
This would sound interesting with an accoustic guitar, maybe a Spanish one. Good job.
3Sean TaylorThis would sound interesting with an accoustic guitar, maybe a Spanish one. Good job.
12/20/2004 c1 9Garnet Aurelia
Do you have a melody for this song? I think it'd be quite succesful. I like it... =D
There was one part in there, where you talked about chapters and climax and the whole thing being a story, and I just shuddered at that, because that's exactly what my life feels like... One big story that someone's writting. So yeah, I guess I like this a lot cause I can sorta relate.. ^_^
9Garnet AureliaDo you have a melody for this song? I think it'd be quite succesful. I like it... =D
There was one part in there, where you talked about chapters and climax and the whole thing being a story, and I just shuddered at that, because that's exactly what my life feels like... One big story that someone's writting. So yeah, I guess I like this a lot cause I can sorta relate.. ^_^
3/17/2004 c1 13XxDragon Princess NikkixX
Very cute and well written. It's obvious that you have a very strong talent. Great job.
Nikki
13XxDragon Princess NikkixXVery cute and well written. It's obvious that you have a very strong talent. Great job.
Nikki
12/12/2003 c2 LilCookie89
I understood this song... Before the
explanation... Whoah. First time for
everything. I really liked, YEAH YOU!
It's really like that y'know. The falling,
the rebuilding. Meh. You're just one of
the few people that 'get it'. Yeah!
I understood this song... Before the
explanation... Whoah. First time for
everything. I really liked, YEAH YOU!
It's really like that y'know. The falling,
the rebuilding. Meh. You're just one of
the few people that 'get it'. Yeah!
12/7/2003 c1 17fontanellemonster
What sexual innuendos? Probably because you used the word "climax". OOh. Sexy.
Um, all in all, it's a sweet little song, nicely written, and a nice length (*nobody* gets their songs to be agood length...they're either too long by a couple of million words, or like...two words altogether).
17fontanellemonsterWhat sexual innuendos? Probably because you used the word "climax". OOh. Sexy.
Um, all in all, it's a sweet little song, nicely written, and a nice length (*nobody* gets their songs to be agood length...they're either too long by a couple of million words, or like...two words altogether).
12/1/2003 c1 5aiur
... i like i like! ooh yup yup! i like lots! *grimace* ... ok, that was seriously airy .
anyways, to a deeper level ... i really like this song because it touches something really deep and true. it's like ... when you care and then you fall and lie broken you NEED to get put back together and it's like ... argh i know i'm not saying this very well but hey you wrote it i'm sure you know how i feel =)
great job and thank you very much for the review ... *bows* ... merci, gracias, and all that junk ;)
~k8
5aiur... i like i like! ooh yup yup! i like lots! *grimace* ... ok, that was seriously airy .
anyways, to a deeper level ... i really like this song because it touches something really deep and true. it's like ... when you care and then you fall and lie broken you NEED to get put back together and it's like ... argh i know i'm not saying this very well but hey you wrote it i'm sure you know how i feel =)
great job and thank you very much for the review ... *bows* ... merci, gracias, and all that junk ;)
~k8
11/21/2003 c1 17OryssaV
Is it me, or is there a sense of sex over there?
I am rather surprised... usually songfic is well... just a songfic? You done a great job of writing a songfic that is more than just a songfic.
Or maybe it is just me, and my interpretation is totally off... But I really liked it.
17OryssaVIs it me, or is there a sense of sex over there?
I am rather surprised... usually songfic is well... just a songfic? You done a great job of writing a songfic that is more than just a songfic.
Or maybe it is just me, and my interpretation is totally off... But I really liked it.
10/10/2003 c1 3The Four Horsemen
You've done a good job here; there are no misspelled words, it flows easily, and for the most part every other line or every line rhymes. But what I did see a lack of is a lack of imagery - metaphors, the whole spiel. I suggest using imagery to keep the reader/listener's attention caught on so they will actually have to _think_ about what they're listening to. Imagery catches people's attention very well, and it allows you to go into a deeper meaning.
-The Four Horsemen
3The Four HorsemenYou've done a good job here; there are no misspelled words, it flows easily, and for the most part every other line or every line rhymes. But what I did see a lack of is a lack of imagery - metaphors, the whole spiel. I suggest using imagery to keep the reader/listener's attention caught on so they will actually have to _think_ about what they're listening to. Imagery catches people's attention very well, and it allows you to go into a deeper meaning.
-The Four Horsemen