for In the park near the swings10/10/2003 c1 
612simpleplan13
very cool cuz you would never guess it was a park... personification is very good! i think heavans should be heavens tho... excellent poem tho!
612simpleplan13very cool cuz you would never guess it was a park... personification is very good! i think heavans should be heavens tho... excellent poem tho!
10/1/2003 c1 1aleppine
A few minor spelling errors ... go back and do something about that, cos it breaks up the flow of a really nice piece of work. I like the moments you've selected from what must have been a huge pool of time. You knew I was gonna like the ref to Placebo :D And I love random refs to park benches, trees, dudes passing by on bikes ... hehehe. I love the nostalgia of the poem, the feel of it rather than any specific lines. We've often shared that feeling, eh? : )
Ciao dudette x
1aleppineA few minor spelling errors ... go back and do something about that, cos it breaks up the flow of a really nice piece of work. I like the moments you've selected from what must have been a huge pool of time. You knew I was gonna like the ref to Placebo :D And I love random refs to park benches, trees, dudes passing by on bikes ... hehehe. I love the nostalgia of the poem, the feel of it rather than any specific lines. We've often shared that feeling, eh? : )
Ciao dudette x
9/16/2003 c1 anna angel
beautiful hun.
i remember too. i will always remember. good times.
beautiful hun.
i remember too. i will always remember. good times.
9/10/2003 c1 33super-rage4
not bad, not bad
just some spelling errors that i noted
other than that, i have to say that i wouldn't mind seeing more of your stuff :)
33super-rage4not bad, not bad
just some spelling errors that i noted
other than that, i have to say that i wouldn't mind seeing more of your stuff :)