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10/18/2003 c1 18Night Breeze
Nice haiku! Good job... it's dense and sais a lot. (yea, it *is* dense, it is "dorplets of lead" *smiles*) Keep writing!

~NB XoX
9/30/2003 c1 127godawful teen-angst poetry
Such dark and powerful words...amazing.

~lyv
9/19/2003 c1 47The intellect
i love ur haikus!

ive had a wierd day... kinda brought me bk 2 the weary reality of homelife extra... brilliant images from this...cudnt b better

caz

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9/18/2003 c1 79Groovy Angel
wow this haiku says a whole lot! It's dark, atmospheric and sad all at the same time. Excellent work! ;o)
9/13/2003 c1 3Ruby-servantof-eli
Sorry butI don't like

Lead is innapropriate and beds just doesn't sit :D

I know i'm a bitch
9/12/2003 c1 35Mime
Woah, awesome haiku! Keep writing!
9/11/2003 c1 612simpleplan13
Wow very powerful.. but I dont like the last line cuz i don't see how sorrow falls... maybe fall, they're my sorrows.. dunno just a suggestion... excellent haiku tho!
9/11/2003 c1 13Meliad
The imagery is outstanding!
9/11/2003 c1 8glitterjewele
oh, this is gorgeous. there really was an aura of darkness about it ~ which didn't stop me from seeing the images you created perfectly. the tears are almost tangible, really. 'twas exceedingly difficult, but if i had to pick a favorite line, it would be "plummeting droplets of lead" ~ by a *hair* though. EXCELLENT haiku, i love it. kudos!
9/10/2003 c1 190Miz E. Mak
that is an awesome haiku! I love the picture of tears falling like lead. so depressing...so full of sorrow...such a good job!
9/10/2003 c1 18wanderingcloud
I love the descriptors and words that you use! Good job.

~Elfie
9/10/2003 c1 1Felyx
i love the short little poems like yours..write more...and check out my story

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