
1/24/2004 c4 sakurafox666
That was pure brillance! I loved it! Write more please! /_^
That was pure brillance! I loved it! Write more please! /_^
9/20/2003 c3
3Seraen
I like the story line so far:) Just one thing: I think it would be easier to read if the formatting was more spaced out. You don't have to indent every new sentance but it might be better if every paragraph was only maybe 3-4 sentances long, and maybe drop down and indent for most lines of dialogue.
Anyway, that was just my little suggestion. Keep up the good work! ^_^

I like the story line so far:) Just one thing: I think it would be easier to read if the formatting was more spaced out. You don't have to indent every new sentance but it might be better if every paragraph was only maybe 3-4 sentances long, and maybe drop down and indent for most lines of dialogue.
Anyway, that was just my little suggestion. Keep up the good work! ^_^