Just In
for Pregnant

5/23/2004 c1 26pneumothorax
Interesting, the way you wrote it. I like the concept of a conversation, on eat each end but found that some of the lines didn't read quite as well because it went from long ones to a short one which seemed really out of place. Personally, I don't agree with the views but you expressed them well. It was good :)
3/14/2004 c1 40Jareth the Monk
I like the way the beginning and the end are constructed, like a point-counterpoint or a phone conversation with the body of the poem as the line connecting the two. Pretty clever.
1/17/2004 c1 10mages-shade
There's a lot of teen pregnanciesin my school, and one of the people I know got pregnant. She kept thebaby and he's adorable. This poem is pretty accurate in how she felt about it and how it was taken by others.
12/15/2003 c1 2ConfectusPapilio
i like this, i don't know why...but...theres something about it...hm...very nice job!
11/14/2003 c1 38Twixt Realities
This was written in a really unique way. Especially the conversation in the beginning and end, very cool touch.

11/1/2003 c1 KatyGirl1219
I really like the way you did this poem. The style of it is interesting, especially the conversation at the beginning and end.

Keep writing, you've got a great gift!

10/29/2003 c1 8SugarCoatedPeaches
This is so true. I love your rhyme scheme. My cousin got pregnant not to long ago and had a baby girl. I can relate so much cuz she's only 16. Keep it up!
10/29/2003 c1 Free-Writer
Great job! I think I would be shocked if someone I knew my age was prgnant too.
10/14/2003 c1 25Akuma Ameya
I agree with your opinion. A girl I know did the same thing. going to this particular school, beign at a disadvantage of any type is nearly fatal. I also respect her for her choice. I also like the way it is written as though speaking to the girl. very nice.

~Dangerous Motives.
10/14/2003 c1 21VelvetHaven
oh wow. i really really like this. I especially love how you did that beginning/end conversation w/ just one side. Wow. Goin' on my faves.
10/12/2003 c1 16Bohemian Muse
first off, thanx for reviewing my photo haiku. anywho, on to MY review. although we may differ on the whole choice/life conflict, i do really like this poem. i especially like the conversation split in 2. but, i wouldn't explain myself at the end. you're taking all the fun away from reading it. the best thing about poetry for me is well, first, the emotion i get reading a good one, but the 2nd best thing is deciphering it and figuring out what it all means. try not to take that away from your readers.
9/22/2003 c1 2BlueFire42
ok then... **stares dumbfoundedly at computer screen** **mutters again ok**

Well, it twas cool- in a way (*not for the girl* but the writing)(

hint: u know the convo, maybe put

P1: Hey girl+ (wateve)

p2: Hey!

coz then it gets less confusing- so yea, i think it's good, but i'm not sure!
9/15/2003 c1 6khakkinen
Wow, powerful stuff. I find that writing poems is the easiest way to express emotion and to let other people know how it's felt. Good work.

Twitter . Help . Sign Up . Cookies . Privacy . Terms of Service