for Proverb3/18/2004 c1 harrietpotter17
i think i get it... it's really good, it makes u think bout life
i think i get it... it's really good, it makes u think bout life
10/9/2003 c1 
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Hey, sorry I haven't reviewed in a really really long time. I mean to, but I never seem to have the time. Well sionec I ahve the time, I am reviewing. This is short and to the point. I totally love it!
~Cirien Phoenix of the Eternal Phlame
145dfgsfdghftgt44Hey, sorry I haven't reviewed in a really really long time. I mean to, but I never seem to have the time. Well sionec I ahve the time, I am reviewing. This is short and to the point. I totally love it!
~Cirien Phoenix of the Eternal Phlame
9/17/2003 c1 190Miz E. Mak
hrm...interesting questions! I don't really know if anyone could explain them to you...so I'm not going to try and bs some response to it all. ^_^
good poem. write on!
190Miz E. Makhrm...interesting questions! I don't really know if anyone could explain them to you...so I'm not going to try and bs some response to it all. ^_^
good poem. write on!
9/17/2003 c1 HyperCaz
I like the rhetorical questions and how you used them. Also...you challenge things such as "seize the day" and war. Short and to the point - very good. No wait - excellent.
God bless.
I like the rhetorical questions and how you used them. Also...you challenge things such as "seize the day" and war. Short and to the point - very good. No wait - excellent.
God bless.
9/16/2003 c1 22White Arab
O_O I LOVE IT! No other way to explain...just do. VERY good. Simple...and just what I needed right now.
"Can we seize the day
Without being caught?"
That was great...
My only critique...is that you might consider adding punctuation. You do on the very last line, but the rest lacks it. I think adding a comma or question mark at the end of each line would create more of a sense of completion.
Congrats on a good piece.
22White ArabO_O I LOVE IT! No other way to explain...just do. VERY good. Simple...and just what I needed right now.
"Can we seize the day
Without being caught?"
That was great...
My only critique...is that you might consider adding punctuation. You do on the very last line, but the rest lacks it. I think adding a comma or question mark at the end of each line would create more of a sense of completion.
Congrats on a good piece.