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1/6/2008 c17 Alenor
hmm...well it was interesting. cya later.
4/22/2004 c17 1Stevshals
You should have a sequel it was really good.
1/12/2004 c17 10Lullaby87
surprising ending but excellent none-the-less. I loved it all! from beginning to end. You're a truly brilliant writer and I can't wait to hear more from you. You managed to completely sum up everything there is to being a teenage girl in one of the concluding sentences where you said something like "boy owned their conversations, but not their hearts. Not yet anyway." ya I loved that. Who needs boys, we're still young :P one day prince charming will come along and sweep eachand every one of us off of our feet, but until then, I'm perfectly fine with havin a little fun ;)
Brilliantly done.
1/5/2004 c17 14Ninsetta Tristel Sundar
oh my god. it's over. honestly i love love love love that last line. so very cool. oh and what elle says...cuz you already knew that i "approved" of her last line. righto so my brother wants me to get off his computer (sometimes i hate being home from school)so i ned to make this nice and short. all i can say is i feel like this story has been while great and fun and all around good writing...something more to you. Ya know what i mean? like when you started writing it im decently sure that you were still in "the club" and now...well...lets just say a lot has changed. and i think that semiautobiograaphical (thinki i just spelled that wrong) Bea grew up as much as we have. so seeing this end is kind of sad because to me it shows the end of another section of our childhood, and you know how i hate the idea of growing old tho i wouldnt mind being twentyone. but it caught this whole were at this point in college at a crossroads and still having fun while were at it really well. and i think this story was fantastic in case you hadn't figured out my thoughts before.
1/3/2004 c17 30nabriton
"But the thing is, from Earth, Venus doesn’t retrograde."
"The planet of love never goes back."
WHOA! WHAT A GREAT ENDING! This story started off all hot and steamy and ended so excellently well written...I am in awe...that is just so unbelievably clever and I doubt I'll ever forget that analogy ever ever ever ever...You are most welcome for my frequent reviews because you deserve them and this ending is sufficient reward for my input...best of luck with your other stories bunnyb! You have a lot of potential and creativity and skill. Maybe I'll see ya around sometime! *mwah + hugglez* BYEZ! (p.s. you rule! and it's jane austen not jane austin but who cares!...that was a great line too!)
1/3/2004 c17 2DarkAngel32
*glomps and bursts into tears* Its all OVER! I can't believe it! And, wow, even after all that it still ended up like the beginning, i like the revelation though. The ending wasn't quite how i pictured it, but suprises are fun, plus the the ending was good anywho. *gives huge hug* THANK YOU SO MUCH! It has been a pleasure to have reviewed your stories! I'm so glad to have participated somewhat in the growing of this story and every juicy chapter, twaha! luved every piece i tell ya^^ Though, i will miss reviewing, so come up with another brilliant story for me to review, before i read this one over 10 times! It shall be like an dead relative, finished, but never forgotten^^(and so close it feels like family, but without the actual relation) so dontcha worry. Anyhow, 'bout the nickname. I just kinda picked off the tip of my mind, no basis really, just thought i might as well have something to call myself by, DarkAngel32 sounds lonely by itself. but Ninja Scroll sounds very interesting, perhaps i take a look at it. YAY! though i'm so glad you recognized the reason behind my e-mail, so nice to see another person who knows about IY and the gang, wonderful anime i say, Takahashi-san is a genius. So, now i conclude, it was an honor to review *bows*
Later Stories and Good Luck to ya!
Catch ya later!
Her final review for this story:
~Wandering Reviewer: DarkAngel32
E-mail me sometime, i'd luv to chat:
1/1/2004 c16 DarkAngel32
Muahaha! The lemon-scent(or rather the actual lemon has entered) yay! our pervy minds can all rejoice now^^ You did a very good job by the way, and despite any pervyness that my mind contains, there is no way i or anyone else could've done it any better, but they of course are your characters, so real and so complicated, and sometimes so tensioned and stressed you'd think that their little heads would pop! *gasp* horrible thought! Well, Happy New Year from the West Coast, and this was a great start to 2004 by reading your fantastic little tale^^
Thanks so much! (and btw, so how much longer do you think it'll go on for? I hope never, but "all good things must come to an end" lol^^)
Hope to review further!
Wandering Reviewer: DarkAngel32
12/30/2003 c16 10Lullaby87
Brilliant! That's all I can say! Absolutely, superbly, fantasmically BRILLIANT!
12/28/2003 c2 14MKC
I like your writing style! I'm hooked on this story already. Keep the chapters coming!
12/28/2003 c15 14Ninsetta Tristel Sundar
johnny depp. is. mine. just so we all know this. i love him. actually i just want to have sex with him, and those are not the same as our dear still innocent but rapidly gaining in knowledge main character is discovering. could there be a bit of foreshadowing in this chapter? huh. nah. not possible... mexican fiesta time. all the way man. i can just see zee, who hopefully does not resemble a scorpio pencil, kissing the back of her neck in a certain kitchen. cuz that would be a tragic waste of bea's virginity. lets also hope his fingernails are clipped (but wait i already know they are because i already read 16...and she checks in a very creative way) hm. i love the little details you throw in. you know. the ones about the list of ingredients and that stuff. it makes it all so much more real...
love your writing. love this story. keep going...one...more...chapter. which is really quite sad. its like...the end of an era. i mean if you compare when you started writing this to now...wow. just wow. ohkay. ill save the rest of these revelations for next week and my horribly long wrapup review.
12/28/2003 c16 Ninsetta Tristel Sundar
nice blow job description...hmm. so so fun. that was it? of course it was. this guy is after all modeled after a certain someone we know. mwahahahaha. well this was splendiferous. im very proud of your het sex. see i told you you could do it. silly girl thinking you couldnt. i hope noone tries to "nail" you for this...oh and as requested i bring the traditional "in real life always have safe sex" it goes on after the blow job before the entry...unless you want to be truly safe...in which case one should keep in mind the risks of herpes and aids that are also associated with oral sex. so i think i may have gone on about the potential risks of sex in the manner of a textbook for long enough. i loved the random thought midkiss. i for one have never been lost in a kiss...although then again i've never actually been in love. but neither is bea. not really anyway. she thinks she is. she'd like to be...but shes not i think.splendidio. cant wait for your next chappie. even if it is...the end...sob. sob.
12/28/2003 c16 30nabriton
*sigh* she's right...it has seemed like a lifetime and now it's almost over...and no you're not incessantly dragging it out...it's a necessity! I kind of feel for Bea actually...but I guess most girls go through that disappointment at some stage or another...darn..
12/23/2003 c15 Wandering Reviewer aka DarkAngel32
AGH! Shoot me now! or at least give me a very painful death...I DIDN"T REVIEW CHAPTER 14! I'm sorry! I really loved it to pieces i swear, but its nice to see everything so peachy (or close to peachy) between the characters, 'cept i betcha there is SOME tension between Zee and Bea! Closure is up and comin' i can smell it (well not actually SMELL it but...yea ya know what i mean dont you?) I have to see Once Upon A Time in Mexico though...Johnny Depp is the greatest, but when i see it, i'm sure i'll get the line about Mexi-Can and Mexi-Can't. But i loved this chapter as i love all of them, plot's great as always, i bet the silver (or at least the bronze) plot bunny came and visited you..but we shall forever look forward to the day that the elusive Golden Plot Bunny shall be captured once more *sigh*
Anyways, hope to keep reviewing!
The Wandering Reviewer~ DarkAngel32
12/22/2003 c15 10Lullaby87
muahahaha! Johnny Depp is so pretty :P *giggle* Although I've yet to see once upon a time in mexico (!slap my hand!) I still love the man to bits! hehehehe...
I'm supposed to be reviewing th story though, not my precious Johnny, so I'll stop with the giggles...but honestly! How does a 40 year old man manage to look so damn scrumptious? haha ok, all finished now...
Excellent chapter! I love that you're able to completely turn emotions on and off. very realistic! Bea bein all confused not knowing how she felt about Zee and the suddenly they go and make out! haha nicely done :P..ya I dunno if that really made sense to you, but it was a compliment none-the-less :P
Hurry with the next chapter! I can't wait!
*Merry Christmas!*
12/22/2003 c15 thecoffeebringer
Chapters 11-15... totally brilliant! Love where you're taking it. Will be more detailed later. P.S. I didn't see Once upon a time in Mexico because I heard Johnny Depp loses his precious beautiful eyes... true? Anyway, yes, fantastic story! So sad that it's coming to an end. :'( Well, let's hope Bea gets some ass. She needs a whole chapter of just graphic... uh... (kids reading this?) hm, ass-getting. Well, consider this my I'm-so-sorry-I-was-mega-stressed-over-stupid-butt-kissing-exams-review. More detailed, chapter for chapter reviews to come. Hopefully before I leave. :) And just make sure Bea's revelation scene isn't glossed over. You know the one ;)
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