for The White Prince12/4/2003 c3 
3Ohma
YAY! I loved the story. Cinnabar, you write VERY well (much better than I can, though I don't think that is very hard).
Yeah, I wish I had more deatailed things to say, but I don't.
3OhmaYAY! I loved the story. Cinnabar, you write VERY well (much better than I can, though I don't think that is very hard).
Yeah, I wish I had more deatailed things to say, but I don't.
11/14/2003 c3 Natasha Browning
Your work is absolutely breathtaking. It feels like everything symbolizes something, but half of it turns out to be literal, and... is it possible to get drunk on a story? I'll be floating all day now.
Oh! And you need to draw a picture of Dios. Your Daemian art is astonishingly lovely (a good writer AND a good artist, you lucky devil), but we need Dios! *is not ashamed to beg*
Your work is absolutely breathtaking. It feels like everything symbolizes something, but half of it turns out to be literal, and... is it possible to get drunk on a story? I'll be floating all day now.
Oh! And you need to draw a picture of Dios. Your Daemian art is astonishingly lovely (a good writer AND a good artist, you lucky devil), but we need Dios! *is not ashamed to beg*
11/9/2003 c2 Sabre Gurl
I like it! It's real good! I can't wait for the next chapter! ~Toni~
I like it! It's real good! I can't wait for the next chapter! ~Toni~
11/9/2003 c2 Soul of Frodo
...Wow. Your writing is as addictive as a drug. Every little nuance and repetition and... wow. Leaves me feeling very inarticulate by comparison.
*sets up tent, packs food, camps out to await next chapter*
...Wow. Your writing is as addictive as a drug. Every little nuance and repetition and... wow. Leaves me feeling very inarticulate by comparison.
*sets up tent, packs food, camps out to await next chapter*
10/25/2003 c1 3Ohma
Wow...that was most certainly NOT what I had expected (I mean that in a good way). That was really good.
There were just a few, easily ignored typos. But nowhere near as many as I end up with when I write (even after correcting them). I would write more but, I want to read the next chapter, so that's all fer now.
3OhmaWow...that was most certainly NOT what I had expected (I mean that in a good way). That was really good.
There were just a few, easily ignored typos. But nowhere near as many as I end up with when I write (even after correcting them). I would write more but, I want to read the next chapter, so that's all fer now.
10/18/2003 c2 11Rushifa
The story is creepy and beautiful at the same time; I really like how you add little everyday details, like the strings on his shorts, and use them to help the story take form. I eagerly await the next chapter.
-Rushifa
11RushifaThe story is creepy and beautiful at the same time; I really like how you add little everyday details, like the strings on his shorts, and use them to help the story take form. I eagerly await the next chapter.
-Rushifa
10/5/2003 c2 Randy The Rambler
This is... disturbing... um... stop lurking
This is... disturbing... um... stop lurking