for F You, Mom1/25/2004 c1 
14arbysauce93
Wow. This is a very powerful poem, and it is sad how often I feel the same way about my mother. According to my mom, it's hormones. THe last line's idea I really like, but somehow it doesn't fit into the rest of the poem. Besides that, a cery nice poem. Keep up the good work!
14arbysauce93Wow. This is a very powerful poem, and it is sad how often I feel the same way about my mother. According to my mom, it's hormones. THe last line's idea I really like, but somehow it doesn't fit into the rest of the poem. Besides that, a cery nice poem. Keep up the good work!
1/25/2004 c1 Soulless Consumer
I can relate too this poem. My mom can expect to much of me. But I understand because my brother has chronic inflamitory demilinating poly neuropothy, and my dad works long hours so he can't help and I wouldn't want him to.
I can relate too this poem. My mom can expect to much of me. But I understand because my brother has chronic inflamitory demilinating poly neuropothy, and my dad works long hours so he can't help and I wouldn't want him to.
1/25/2004 c1 4The Great Muses
Ahem, I think that the rating needs to be a little higher *Coughs* Yes ... but i relate EXTREMELY well.
I like the rhythm, except at the end ... it kinda loses it there. Rhyme ... good. =D
4The Great MusesAhem, I think that the rating needs to be a little higher *Coughs* Yes ... but i relate EXTREMELY well.
I like the rhythm, except at the end ... it kinda loses it there. Rhyme ... good. =D
12/15/2003 c1 45Grendel
Wow! It is a hard a strong stuff here. It is a mirror of revolt against the impositions that we face with our parents. So true. GREAT!
45GrendelWow! It is a hard a strong stuff here. It is a mirror of revolt against the impositions that we face with our parents. So true. GREAT!
10/4/2003 c1 220Namir Swiftpaw
Change your title. I am glad I happened to click on the "Just In" page.
If Fictionpress sees that you have "Fuck" in your title, they'll ban you for a week. So, just change the title to something more benign, and things should be okay. =)
Nie poem, otherwise, though...it was sad.
~Namir Swiftpaw
220Namir SwiftpawChange your title. I am glad I happened to click on the "Just In" page.
If Fictionpress sees that you have "Fuck" in your title, they'll ban you for a week. So, just change the title to something more benign, and things should be okay. =)
Nie poem, otherwise, though...it was sad.
~Namir Swiftpaw