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3/8/2011 c1 topyxyz
This is amazing!
7/11/2009 c1 4olgite the squidgal
You gave this short story an ominous atmosphere which I like since it kept me off-balance as to what was inside the Red Room. It's also great the way you've captured how menacing the unknown is from a child's point of view.
7/20/2006 c1 5Lima Beans
it does need some touch ups.gramatical ones but not alot alomst nonexistant really but there still there. and could u try making alittle more sence in it too? i was alittle lost in some parts like when Tania went to open HER bedroom door u said THE door and not her. thats just one but other than that it was fantastic! my heart was racing when hers was and everything. u have a nice style just a few touch ups so its easier to follow and it will be even more perfect than it is now
7/22/2003 c1 Monique
This was a good story and I really enjoyed taking the time to read it.
10/20/2002 c1 Lil1
I thought it was something he he...you know...coz I read some stories like this, same red room, same noise, only ending up with the mom being a prostitute-anyway, that's just my dirty mind speaking-NICE STORY! ENDING REALLY SURPISED ME-I GOT A LITTLE SCARED THOUGH! I LOVE GETTING SCARED THAT'S WHY I LOVE YOUR STORIES! Looks at list-oh, this is the last general fiction? Pls. write more!
8/19/2000 c1 Lee Anna 10
WOW! This rocks!
4/11/2000 c1 Denise Willis
The end of this surprised me...I like to be surprised!Deexxx
4/11/2000 c1 jai
whoa, you keep getting better and better!I am in awe!

Man, you should find some more places to "publish",I'm sure there's more people who will want to read this!
4/11/2000 c1 netshark
Strange...very strange...btw, do you write professionally?

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