for Don't11/26/2003 c1 
9Sarah-Angel87
wow...thats all i can really say...the poem itsself is very well written, and the emotion speaks volumes. you are a very good writer...dont ever stop using such a gift.
9Sarah-Angel87wow...thats all i can really say...the poem itsself is very well written, and the emotion speaks volumes. you are a very good writer...dont ever stop using such a gift.
11/4/2003 c1 9Azusasan
...I totally envy your poetry skills. This flowed differently than most poems; but I still loved it. The poems based on true occurences seem to hit home the hardest, don't they?
9Azusasan...I totally envy your poetry skills. This flowed differently than most poems; but I still loved it. The poems based on true occurences seem to hit home the hardest, don't they?
11/4/2003 c1 1aleppine
MEEP. I SWEAR I reviewed this? *single eyebrow raised high*
The structure was so effective. The way that some of the things were repeated - 'It's okay, you said, it's okay' - likewise. I love the way the poem seemed to swim in my head nausea-like - the colours, the words minimised to emphasise single words like a slap in the midst if the dizzy swimming - 'Heart ... Stopped ...'
Great portrayal. I'm sorry it happened, but you said it turned out fine, so ... oh look, great poetry produced along the way! *yippee*
I have a bone to pick with you. I refuse to email you about it because if I do it here publically, maybe other people will take up my chant. WHAT HAPPENED TO UPDATES ON LOKI? WHAT? WHAT? I updated. You did not. EH? EH? No excuse. None. It's been over two months ... I've been noticing ...
Do not smile cheekily, young lady. Go. Write. Now.
*shakes head, sniffs in haughty disappointment*
; )
On the other thing - will mail you soon.
1aleppineMEEP. I SWEAR I reviewed this? *single eyebrow raised high*
The structure was so effective. The way that some of the things were repeated - 'It's okay, you said, it's okay' - likewise. I love the way the poem seemed to swim in my head nausea-like - the colours, the words minimised to emphasise single words like a slap in the midst if the dizzy swimming - 'Heart ... Stopped ...'
Great portrayal. I'm sorry it happened, but you said it turned out fine, so ... oh look, great poetry produced along the way! *yippee*
I have a bone to pick with you. I refuse to email you about it because if I do it here publically, maybe other people will take up my chant. WHAT HAPPENED TO UPDATES ON LOKI? WHAT? WHAT? I updated. You did not. EH? EH? No excuse. None. It's been over two months ... I've been noticing ...
Do not smile cheekily, young lady. Go. Write. Now.
*shakes head, sniffs in haughty disappointment*
; )
On the other thing - will mail you soon.
11/3/2003 c1 116Incubabe
God, I feel so... I don't know... just empty and numb and sad and everything at once.
I'm also really sad for you. I hope all this saving the world stuff isn't taking too much of a toll on you. This is so far removed from your usual work... yeah, worried is a word I would use.
116IncubabeGod, I feel so... I don't know... just empty and numb and sad and everything at once.
I'm also really sad for you. I hope all this saving the world stuff isn't taking too much of a toll on you. This is so far removed from your usual work... yeah, worried is a word I would use.
10/9/2003 c1 Alaurei
*sigh* Reminds me of my days. Hrm, it wasn't that long ago was it?
Your friend was lucky to have you. I mean, I was to but the one to find out was my mom from my cousin. I doubt you want to hear this anyway. So, I know what you and your friend are going through though I didn't cut myself. My friend is though. I've told some authorities without her knowing and they're handling it. Hopefully I did the right thing.
My councilor told me that if writting is what I enjoy doing, I need to keep it up so that's hwy I'm still up on fictionpress. It helps me relieve myself and I don't find myself in those depressed positions anymore. If you or your friend need someone to talk to over the internet, I dont' know you or your friend so you could jsut let it all out and I'd give you my best advice because I coudln't tell anyone. Who would I tell?
Anyway, onto your poem. I thought it was very interesting the way your wrost it. Carrying on some of the sentences to the next line. I liked it though. It made the poem seem as if you were studdering, as if you were crying, or, you were taking your time to make each word mean it and you could feel the words. I felt the words press themsevles into my heart and my mind. What an effect.
Oh, thanks for reading Unforgotten Clouds. Heh, I have the same problem as you for not updating. School. I rather read people's stories than type my own so once I'm caught up, I'll type more. I'm also reading book report books for two classes so, I'm getting in the mood to read. XD. Anyway, great work and I'll talk to you later.
-Nickel City
"To infinity, and beyond!"
*sigh* Reminds me of my days. Hrm, it wasn't that long ago was it?
Your friend was lucky to have you. I mean, I was to but the one to find out was my mom from my cousin. I doubt you want to hear this anyway. So, I know what you and your friend are going through though I didn't cut myself. My friend is though. I've told some authorities without her knowing and they're handling it. Hopefully I did the right thing.
My councilor told me that if writting is what I enjoy doing, I need to keep it up so that's hwy I'm still up on fictionpress. It helps me relieve myself and I don't find myself in those depressed positions anymore. If you or your friend need someone to talk to over the internet, I dont' know you or your friend so you could jsut let it all out and I'd give you my best advice because I coudln't tell anyone. Who would I tell?
Anyway, onto your poem. I thought it was very interesting the way your wrost it. Carrying on some of the sentences to the next line. I liked it though. It made the poem seem as if you were studdering, as if you were crying, or, you were taking your time to make each word mean it and you could feel the words. I felt the words press themsevles into my heart and my mind. What an effect.
Oh, thanks for reading Unforgotten Clouds. Heh, I have the same problem as you for not updating. School. I rather read people's stories than type my own so once I'm caught up, I'll type more. I'm also reading book report books for two classes so, I'm getting in the mood to read. XD. Anyway, great work and I'll talk to you later.
-Nickel City
"To infinity, and beyond!"