for Remember Me5/17/2004 c1 
17the mouse that roared
The repetition is powerful. And the last line is interesting. Good job.
17the mouse that roaredThe repetition is powerful. And the last line is interesting. Good job.
5/17/2004 c1 the mouse that roared
The repetition is powerful. And the last line is interesting. Good job.
The repetition is powerful. And the last line is interesting. Good job.
11/25/2003 c1 16grim'alkin
whew! i had to read this twice in quick succession- wow! i often wonder how people write like this- often they tell me they had to- tell me, is it the same for you?
i liked this poem because i can't fully understand it! i don't know why- but, i really like this. keep it up and i'd love to see more of your work!
ja ne! fav. list!
16grim'alkinwhew! i had to read this twice in quick succession- wow! i often wonder how people write like this- often they tell me they had to- tell me, is it the same for you?
i liked this poem because i can't fully understand it! i don't know why- but, i really like this. keep it up and i'd love to see more of your work!
ja ne! fav. list!
11/14/2003 c1 DIEDELETED
Yay ^_^ Another song. You should look into submitting some of this stuff you know. Its good.
Yay ^_^ Another song. You should look into submitting some of this stuff you know. Its good.
10/27/2003 c1 1killerkelkeller
hn...some lines doesn't make sense...but its probably cuz i'm half asleep in class now..not bad
1killerkelkellerhn...some lines doesn't make sense...but its probably cuz i'm half asleep in class now..not bad
10/20/2003 c1 1241
this is good stuff...hope there's more to come!
peace...
this is good stuff...hope there's more to come!
peace...
10/20/2003 c1 Sarah M
im not sure i understand the part at the beginning about "knife-like wounds from faerie blades", but besides that it's really good! although i definitly think that it would be great as a song, even better than it is as a poem. try it!
im not sure i understand the part at the beginning about "knife-like wounds from faerie blades", but besides that it's really good! although i definitly think that it would be great as a song, even better than it is as a poem. try it!
10/14/2003 c1 56Stormbringer
Dude, your poems are like so awesome. I don't see a lot like yours. Thanks for reviewing my poems.
56StormbringerDude, your poems are like so awesome. I don't see a lot like yours. Thanks for reviewing my poems.
10/10/2003 c1 14Dirty Wallpaper
wow, that was amazing, such power, raw emotion, your descriptions were very eruptive and effectiveso beautiful, very lovely indeed, great job, kudos.
14Dirty Wallpaperwow, that was amazing, such power, raw emotion, your descriptions were very eruptive and effectiveso beautiful, very lovely indeed, great job, kudos.
10/10/2003 c1 15vamprincess1986
I love the line
"Midnight stars fall too soon", It creates a sense of understanding, maybe you're afraid of life ending, time moving too fast, the night falls so soon after day begins. You feel that life is passing you by faster than it should, you have so many things that you want to accomplish before you die. I feel this way practicly all the time, I fell like I haven't done enough with my life.
Thanks for reviewing my work, it helps to know that others find my work inspirational, I definatly find yours inspirational, it contains beauty developed in an irrational, make believe manner.
15vamprincess1986I love the line
"Midnight stars fall too soon", It creates a sense of understanding, maybe you're afraid of life ending, time moving too fast, the night falls so soon after day begins. You feel that life is passing you by faster than it should, you have so many things that you want to accomplish before you die. I feel this way practicly all the time, I fell like I haven't done enough with my life.
Thanks for reviewing my work, it helps to know that others find my work inspirational, I definatly find yours inspirational, it contains beauty developed in an irrational, make believe manner.
10/10/2003 c1 38Shadafakup
I presume this is a song?
Anyway, that was fantastic..
Really powerful, moving and intense..
Some of the descriptions were wonderful, they hit me really hard..
Hnng, love the lines :
"Though you see no scars,
They live, ache, bleed"
The last three words have this really kinky tone to it..
*runs around repeatin it*
Anyway, rhyming was great.. Balance was achieved as well..
The whole poem had this nice ring to it and I loved the tone..
A few emotions and imagery present in the poem was really effective..
Beautiful piece, the ending was particularly good..
~Shadafakup
P.S. If I am not wrong, you reviewed me quite awhile back.. Sorry this took so long.. Anyway thanks.. =)
38ShadafakupI presume this is a song?
Anyway, that was fantastic..
Really powerful, moving and intense..
Some of the descriptions were wonderful, they hit me really hard..
Hnng, love the lines :
"Though you see no scars,
They live, ache, bleed"
The last three words have this really kinky tone to it..
*runs around repeatin it*
Anyway, rhyming was great.. Balance was achieved as well..
The whole poem had this nice ring to it and I loved the tone..
A few emotions and imagery present in the poem was really effective..
Beautiful piece, the ending was particularly good..
~Shadafakup
P.S. If I am not wrong, you reviewed me quite awhile back.. Sorry this took so long.. Anyway thanks.. =)