7/7/2005 c1 90The Zaniak
Ouch. Chilling. I'm not normally a fan of non-rhyming poetry, but your sense of flow is fantastic.

5/31/2004 c1 1Elyon E. Silvertongue
O.O I don't understand poetry very much... not at all... but I like this piece. It seems quite... intense? Dramatic? What's the correct term for this? I dunno... anyway, I liked it

4/17/2004 c1 53Artemis Astralstar
*whistles* wow. I like how the lines are so short, and the words lull you into a sense of security, even though it is descriing slowly eating away your soul. the words you chose were so, somnolent, looking at them all together, they flow so well, like a brook, except not as happy as a brook, as brooks are sweet, and are accompanied by singing. slowly, dripping away, eroding... really good idea, and the last line separated woke me up, seeing the evil in this. Great work!

12/7/2003 c1 92Celestial Sailor
In many poems, shortness of wording infers insanity, but surely such an assumption cannot be made so abruptly. Hence it can be said, the narration is to be listened to, not the personification. The words are simple and flow through your mind at ease, reminding you of the emphasis each line has on you. Once you have studied each word carefully and pieced together the logical puzzle, you will have fully understood the depth of this pessimistic poem.
Well done.
-Celestial Sailor
(Thank you sincerely for your many reviews and kind words, they were greatly useful!)

10/30/2003 c1 64not sure yet
wow, very dark, esp to the poetry of yours i was just reading, but still, i LOVE it, excellent flow to it and it seems very soft in the way its read yet very potent and almost evilness...no, not evil, but a darker emotion to it, really enjoyed this, nicely done

10/19/2003 c1 8glitterjewele
*GASP* a new post. HOW could i have missed it? *kicks self* *winces with pain* *resigns self to the knowlege that the pain is well deserved*

this is SO GREAT. it's a complete contrast to your usual style, but it has every ounce of your usual brilliance ~ in fact i rather enjoyed the variation. the title is absolutely perfect in every way, this poem absolutely reeks of 'gentle depression' from the images to the feelings to the sounds of the words to the format to the rhythm, i mean *everything* just blends together so amazingly here to create one heck of a mind-blowing effect. the repetition of the 'your everything's at the end was *so* powerful ~ especially when you skipped a line before you put down the last one, it really knocked me off my feet, i could just feel the air being sucked out of me in a big *whoosh* when i read it. i honestly can't choose favorite lines, but my favorite little section is the very beginning "sadness/in the dark/loves the lonely" ~ i paused and pondered that for a few moments and it really set the scene very well indeed. AWESOME job, chica, yet again you astound me with your insurpassable brilliance. YOU ARE AMAZING! do post again soon and i promise to review faster in spite of all the ugly midterms, *promise!* keep it up and MAJOR kudos for this one. *breaks into enthusiastic applause*

10/18/2003 c1 15BecomingMyself
Yes, it is so sad it is recognized by me; Gentle depression...

Short, simple, but so strong..

Good writing: Your everything!

Well written and good structure, depressing, but hey, that is what writing is all about to me...

Write on!