for How can you10/18/2003 c1 januliscious
hi great poem, i understand the idea you r trying to convey, however there r a few very critical things i want to point out. in the 3rd stanza where it say how can you make a stubborn person changes its mind, you ere talking about a person, so i tink you should put thier, or his or her instead of 'it'. In the 2nd stanza it seemed like you were talking to a person about very detailed and intricate thinggs, howver in the stanzas follwing through it was like you were talking to people varying from the reader herself or to all rich people. as i said i have a very critical eye bcos i go to this academy and i major in a class that critiqures like this. i realy like this poem or i wouldnt have taken the time to even write tis. great message.
hi great poem, i understand the idea you r trying to convey, however there r a few very critical things i want to point out. in the 3rd stanza where it say how can you make a stubborn person changes its mind, you ere talking about a person, so i tink you should put thier, or his or her instead of 'it'. In the 2nd stanza it seemed like you were talking to a person about very detailed and intricate thinggs, howver in the stanzas follwing through it was like you were talking to people varying from the reader herself or to all rich people. as i said i have a very critical eye bcos i go to this academy and i major in a class that critiqures like this. i realy like this poem or i wouldnt have taken the time to even write tis. great message.