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4/14/2004 c1 79CrimsonCat
I got chills as I read this. There are some lines that I simply adore and admire.. 'luminosity is an illusion;/a distraction from the darkness beneath.'
I also really love the last two lines in 1. and 2 was so real that it hurt. Everything you write seems to knock the breath out of my body. Does that make sense?
*Checks 'add story to favs list'*
10/22/2003 c1 TheOddOne too lazy to sign in
I absolutely love how the first line ties into the title. "this isn't a game." The format is so effective. The paragraph seems seperate from the rest of verse 1. Almost like a side statement, but really the main body of the poem. I have a hard time with this poem. It isn't obvious. I have to read it over and over. This poem is just beautiful.
10/22/2003 c1 13kirsten was
Woah. Dude, I really like this. Its extremely original. Sounds like a song lyric lol.

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