1/20/2004 c1 1Arunam
I see that this one is not very famous. After reading it, I can see why. First off, its not in any format that is understandable, and it definitly needs work.
One good factor is your charactorizing. People are people. Writing is bringing out the people. Writing is making people. Picture yourself as a god, or better yet, THAT PERSON. There are many different traits, personalities, etc...that that one person has. Writers must trap that in, and bring it out. Here, you have done that.
There is this mysterous boy, who seems to care about this girl, but doesn't know how to live his life. He's serous, protective, and almost to the point of rude.
On the other hand, you have the girl. She's a I don't care about what happens to me, as long as you treat my like an equall.
They are perfect for relationships. Both are the opposites. But in between, there is the stranger.
He's supposedly a womanizer. And that is all we find.
Writing is an art, something that if not practiced, will go away. From the many things you have written over the time that I have been stalking you, I see that you have yet to perfect that art, it is almost like you don't care. The only things finished are your poems, which I don't want to review, because there are so many. I would rather you pick something up, preferably this one, or the one you started "Forgets," and finish it. It would say something on your part.
I see that this format in which you are writing in is an expirement. It is almost like a skript. The change is a marvel, and will really kick off if you continue. Do not slack off. If writing was easy, anyone would do it. Don't be anyone. Be a person
~~Fiction
I see that this one is not very famous. After reading it, I can see why. First off, its not in any format that is understandable, and it definitly needs work.
One good factor is your charactorizing. People are people. Writing is bringing out the people. Writing is making people. Picture yourself as a god, or better yet, THAT PERSON. There are many different traits, personalities, etc...that that one person has. Writers must trap that in, and bring it out. Here, you have done that.
There is this mysterous boy, who seems to care about this girl, but doesn't know how to live his life. He's serous, protective, and almost to the point of rude.
On the other hand, you have the girl. She's a I don't care about what happens to me, as long as you treat my like an equall.
They are perfect for relationships. Both are the opposites. But in between, there is the stranger.
He's supposedly a womanizer. And that is all we find.
Writing is an art, something that if not practiced, will go away. From the many things you have written over the time that I have been stalking you, I see that you have yet to perfect that art, it is almost like you don't care. The only things finished are your poems, which I don't want to review, because there are so many. I would rather you pick something up, preferably this one, or the one you started "Forgets," and finish it. It would say something on your part.
I see that this format in which you are writing in is an expirement. It is almost like a skript. The change is a marvel, and will really kick off if you continue. Do not slack off. If writing was easy, anyone would do it. Don't be anyone. Be a person
~~Fiction