for A Lonely Corner5/18/2005 c1 
54Serendipitous Passage
Very nice (erm, the ideas and flow, not the suicide). You describe powerful and frightening situations very well. Great job.
In response to the review you left on my short story, "One Day Of Faith," what haunts me about Bond's death is that a few months earlier he -had- told me not to give in. I wish every day that he had remembered his words... but then I wonder if he isn't better off where he is. Anyway, thanks for the review. Keep up the good work!
Pelase R&R some of my work. I'll return the favor.
54Serendipitous PassageVery nice (erm, the ideas and flow, not the suicide). You describe powerful and frightening situations very well. Great job.
In response to the review you left on my short story, "One Day Of Faith," what haunts me about Bond's death is that a few months earlier he -had- told me not to give in. I wish every day that he had remembered his words... but then I wonder if he isn't better off where he is. Anyway, thanks for the review. Keep up the good work!
Pelase R&R some of my work. I'll return the favor.
3/5/2005 c1 13aquamoon222
Well written! I could truly feel her pain; the main charater is a very strong girl, how she endured so much, and the end is very frightening and made me literally hold my breath! The pain is so strong is this. please update, I can't wait to hear more!:)
13aquamoon222Well written! I could truly feel her pain; the main charater is a very strong girl, how she endured so much, and the end is very frightening and made me literally hold my breath! The pain is so strong is this. please update, I can't wait to hear more!:)
3/4/2005 c1 Life and Death
kool! i liked thiz story! i really like it! thiz waz ur first one? kool! i really like it! i'm hoping to have a poem up soon...it'z gonna be good! *ahem* great story! Life and Death
kool! i liked thiz story! i really like it! thiz waz ur first one? kool! i really like it! i'm hoping to have a poem up soon...it'z gonna be good! *ahem* great story! Life and Death
2/25/2005 c1 Xavier Everett
Just a thought: you might want to put the whole flashback into italics or bold or something: just don't put START and END at the start and end. It's too blunt, and it breaks the story up too much. That feature spoilt this story for me, but I must say that the text is interesting. It's good for a first try, and you seem to have the potential to write very very well.
Xavier
Just a thought: you might want to put the whole flashback into italics or bold or something: just don't put START and END at the start and end. It's too blunt, and it breaks the story up too much. That feature spoilt this story for me, but I must say that the text is interesting. It's good for a first try, and you seem to have the potential to write very very well.
Xavier
6/29/2004 c1 25kaiialyne
Ok...I really do like the mood of your writing, but (having just read all three pieces in quick succession) I must say that you need new inspiration. Each story has it's own merits, but the general trend is unvaried and dims my otherwise high opinion of your work. Also, I would love to see you lengthen this, allowing more depth and plot to develope before you finish.
25kaiialyneOk...I really do like the mood of your writing, but (having just read all three pieces in quick succession) I must say that you need new inspiration. Each story has it's own merits, but the general trend is unvaried and dims my otherwise high opinion of your work. Also, I would love to see you lengthen this, allowing more depth and plot to develope before you finish.
6/15/2004 c1 12Saharian
Okay you just succeeded in making me cry...it may have something to do with the fact that one of my best friends went through something like this recently and we just stopped her from killing herself...but it also has to do with your awesome writing. Most one shots like this don't turn out that well, they end up with people asking a million questions and wanting more but I love this just the way it is. Great, awesome, stupendous! I love adjectives...
Saharian
12SaharianOkay you just succeeded in making me cry...it may have something to do with the fact that one of my best friends went through something like this recently and we just stopped her from killing herself...but it also has to do with your awesome writing. Most one shots like this don't turn out that well, they end up with people asking a million questions and wanting more but I love this just the way it is. Great, awesome, stupendous! I love adjectives...
Saharian
11/29/2003 c1 32Stormy Daye
Good story! Lots od good description. You shoudl continue with it.
Thanks for the reviews of my story, "Not So Perfect" I REALLY appreciate it!
32Stormy DayeGood story! Lots od good description. You shoudl continue with it.
Thanks for the reviews of my story, "Not So Perfect" I REALLY appreciate it!
11/15/2003 c1 77Vlaadimir
'There’s a time in person’s life where you can’t just take it anymore…and I’m afraid, I’m getting closer to it. A human being can only take so much before breaking down to the ultimate solution.'
My favorite lines of your story.
Sad and depressing, and even a little haunting, but very powerful. It was really great.
77Vlaadimir'There’s a time in person’s life where you can’t just take it anymore…and I’m afraid, I’m getting closer to it. A human being can only take so much before breaking down to the ultimate solution.'
My favorite lines of your story.
Sad and depressing, and even a little haunting, but very powerful. It was really great.
11/14/2003 c1 butterfly
Hi!
I finally found the time to get to your fic. I'm so sorry, I'm really flooded with work recently and my head isn't working too well...
Anyway, tough theme. I hope you're not in any a situation as near as terrible in your life. Why do I say so? because in my opinion, you can't write real angst if you haven't experienced it. I usually avoid it because I know I'd get too depressed and I don't want that... Your story is a nice read, though, and I think you have stlye. Maybe you should try imagining even more the depth of her feelings - be her even more. Would you really think about your grades when you are about to commit suicide?
Well, I hope you don't take this wrong. It's just a suggestion, and I really liked the story.
Post more soon!
love,
butterfly
Hi!
I finally found the time to get to your fic. I'm so sorry, I'm really flooded with work recently and my head isn't working too well...
Anyway, tough theme. I hope you're not in any a situation as near as terrible in your life. Why do I say so? because in my opinion, you can't write real angst if you haven't experienced it. I usually avoid it because I know I'd get too depressed and I don't want that... Your story is a nice read, though, and I think you have stlye. Maybe you should try imagining even more the depth of her feelings - be her even more. Would you really think about your grades when you are about to commit suicide?
Well, I hope you don't take this wrong. It's just a suggestion, and I really liked the story.
Post more soon!
love,
butterfly
11/2/2003 c1 The Moon Bleeds The SunCries
REALLY LUV UR STORY!
REALLY LUV UR STORY!
11/1/2003 c1 Kathryn
I thought it was very good, sad though. You said this was your first time writing and for the first try it was great! Hope you'll put more writings on the website..
I thought it was very good, sad though. You said this was your first time writing and for the first try it was great! Hope you'll put more writings on the website..