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6/1/2004 c1 174marshbar960
once again, another relatable poem...you know, i'm in the process of working on a play that applies to both of us. it's called the world's little sister. once i finished writing it, i'll let you know so you can read it and tell me what you think.
i have a few comments for this poem as well. i liked how you portrayed your feelings, developed your overall mood by using repitition and how you were open in expressing yourself. i do, however, feel that "shut up" is a little too blunt for your parents. just an observation but please don't let it rock your boat b/c i can definitely feel your frustration and anger. thanks for sharing and please keep writing!
2/17/2004 c1 5Chateau D'If
truely truely depressed huh? *sighs* well, they poems are still very good!

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