for Dying Bush6/6/2005 c1 Silk Weaker
Right, natural "kigo", but still, like most poetry aside from narrative, I think a meaning comes before imagery. The metaphor is lost to me, do explain if there is one.
Right, natural "kigo", but still, like most poetry aside from narrative, I think a meaning comes before imagery. The metaphor is lost to me, do explain if there is one.
1/19/2004 c1 
121Seeker of the Way
Not bad. Um, it is more like just a description. Good form, nice sound; but no subtext I suppose? I am not flaming you, just trying to give an honest constructive criticism. But, I AM going to check out the rest of your works, so yAy!
121Seeker of the WayNot bad. Um, it is more like just a description. Good form, nice sound; but no subtext I suppose? I am not flaming you, just trying to give an honest constructive criticism. But, I AM going to check out the rest of your works, so yAy!
11/4/2003 c1 14Twist My Blue
Nice. For a while there I thought u were talkin' 'bout George Bush. Sorry. :P
14Twist My BlueNice. For a while there I thought u were talkin' 'bout George Bush. Sorry. :P