for First Person Perspective4/14/2017 c11 
4sage1111
This is kind of cliche, but really, really good! Oh my god, you pulled this off soo well! I'm amazed
I suspected Naomi first thing, and then I stated to think it was Calum for a bit until chapter eight when I got lost and settled for their father as the most likely murderer. but I only thought that because he was the only person they hadn't payed much attention to, but was still a likely candidate. My point is you really did this well, and I was so curious because there was so many things happening, and every suspect was so likely, but then it all fit in the end :)
Haha, I also love Blake's personality :D I can't explain it but its so endearing to me. thank you soooo much for writing this!
Oh! and it wasn't to slow or quick paced, which is rare for mysteries
4sage1111This is kind of cliche, but really, really good! Oh my god, you pulled this off soo well! I'm amazed
I suspected Naomi first thing, and then I stated to think it was Calum for a bit until chapter eight when I got lost and settled for their father as the most likely murderer. but I only thought that because he was the only person they hadn't payed much attention to, but was still a likely candidate. My point is you really did this well, and I was so curious because there was so many things happening, and every suspect was so likely, but then it all fit in the end :)
Haha, I also love Blake's personality :D I can't explain it but its so endearing to me. thank you soooo much for writing this!
Oh! and it wasn't to slow or quick paced, which is rare for mysteries
1/22/2017 c11 The Orange Cow
Can I still say "called it" if they met on the beach instead of the bar?
Anywho, thanks for the story! It was very enjoyable. Unfortunately, it didn't end up meriting its M rating, but I guess that's how things go sometimes.
Can I still say "called it" if they met on the beach instead of the bar?
Anywho, thanks for the story! It was very enjoyable. Unfortunately, it didn't end up meriting its M rating, but I guess that's how things go sometimes.
1/22/2017 c10 The Orange Cow
Can I still say "called it" if I suspected about half a dozen of the characters?
Placing bets: they wake up back in Briton, and Callum and Blake randomly meet up at the Revenge bar months later.
Can I still say "called it" if I suspected about half a dozen of the characters?
Placing bets: they wake up back in Briton, and Callum and Blake randomly meet up at the Revenge bar months later.
1/22/2017 c9 The Orange Cow
At this point, he might as well tell Callum what he told Ree.
Oddball side theory: Ree is actually the murderer! Or not...
At this point, he might as well tell Callum what he told Ree.
Oddball side theory: Ree is actually the murderer! Or not...
1/21/2017 c7 The Orange Cow
I've shifted the proposed role of the True Antagonist to the dad. He acted kind of stern a few chapters ago, and authors on this site have a metaphorical hard on for vilainizing patriarchal figures.
Also, the overwhelmingly vast majority of postmodernism is pretentious houseshit made by wannabe artists trying to out hipster each other.
Thank you for the chapter!
I've shifted the proposed role of the True Antagonist to the dad. He acted kind of stern a few chapters ago, and authors on this site have a metaphorical hard on for vilainizing patriarchal figures.
Also, the overwhelmingly vast majority of postmodernism is pretentious houseshit made by wannabe artists trying to out hipster each other.
Thank you for the chapter!
1/21/2017 c6 The Orange Cow
Hearing Callum say "knock you up" made me do a double take. You might want to google what that phase means in America if you want a chuckle.
Hearing Callum say "knock you up" made me do a double take. You might want to google what that phase means in America if you want a chuckle.
1/21/2017 c5 The Orange Cow
I got to wonder if something in particular happened during the day to set her tits on fire at the end there.
I got to wonder if something in particular happened during the day to set her tits on fire at the end there.
1/20/2017 c2 The Orange Cow
Calling it now, Callum will turn out to just be misunderstood(seeing as how it looks like he is the main love interest), and Will is going to be the True Antagonist.
Calling it now, Callum will turn out to just be misunderstood(seeing as how it looks like he is the main love interest), and Will is going to be the True Antagonist.
4/21/2015 c11 chocovic-chu
This. Is. Sooo. BRILLIANT! I'm so much impressed! Damn how come you wrote this story so good? And Blake was adorkable, I love him.
Thanks for sharing!
This. Is. Sooo. BRILLIANT! I'm so much impressed! Damn how come you wrote this story so good? And Blake was adorkable, I love him.
Thanks for sharing!
7/11/2013 c11 allancaldera
I really like was definitely different of what I read.I thought Naomi would have been the killer but oh and Blake are really good together I love them as a couple and her cousin was adorable too.
I really like was definitely different of what I read.I thought Naomi would have been the killer but oh and Blake are really good together I love them as a couple and her cousin was adorable too.
5/3/2013 c11 Trillpuv
Oh my god. OH my GOD, that was amazing. If you ever wrote a trashy crime thiller, I think I would read it. Seriously, with serious intent. The execution of this was simply stunning, despite only being eleven chapters. I'm glad Callum wasn't really the killer; that probably would've broken my heart. And yay for happy endings! :)
Oh my god. OH my GOD, that was amazing. If you ever wrote a trashy crime thiller, I think I would read it. Seriously, with serious intent. The execution of this was simply stunning, despite only being eleven chapters. I'm glad Callum wasn't really the killer; that probably would've broken my heart. And yay for happy endings! :)