
3/22/2004 c1
55Lellida
Definitly feel the pain and anger coming from the poem- very nicely written. The ending in the second stanza kinda shocked me- the poem took a new direction. I like that! Oh and techinical question; how did you get the poem centered like that? I've tried but it never seems to work for me, and I have a poem or two that needs certain formatting. Plz let me know and write more!

Definitly feel the pain and anger coming from the poem- very nicely written. The ending in the second stanza kinda shocked me- the poem took a new direction. I like that! Oh and techinical question; how did you get the poem centered like that? I've tried but it never seems to work for me, and I have a poem or two that needs certain formatting. Plz let me know and write more!
12/5/2003 c1
1Pirouette
sad, i'll admit i don't really, truly understand but i feel a small part of what you mean and i believe this is a exellent piece and you should keep up writing.

sad, i'll admit i don't really, truly understand but i feel a small part of what you mean and i believe this is a exellent piece and you should keep up writing.
11/29/2003 c1
38Shadafakup
Did i remember wrongly, or did you actually have a lot more pieces on this site..
Anyway, to the point, I enjoyed this piece.. Painful, expressive and real, it speaks clearly to the reader..
The thoughts and emotions conveyed here are distinct and moving..
Well done with the rhyming, it was really natural and helped the piece flow awesomely..
Sad and tragic, it is a poem that many people can relate to..
Wonderful job here, it was simply a joy and to read this..
You know the thing they say about how words can make you feel so much? You have achieved just that in the piece..
I'm so greatful you wrote this..
Amazing, Really..
~Shadafakup

Did i remember wrongly, or did you actually have a lot more pieces on this site..
Anyway, to the point, I enjoyed this piece.. Painful, expressive and real, it speaks clearly to the reader..
The thoughts and emotions conveyed here are distinct and moving..
Well done with the rhyming, it was really natural and helped the piece flow awesomely..
Sad and tragic, it is a poem that many people can relate to..
Wonderful job here, it was simply a joy and to read this..
You know the thing they say about how words can make you feel so much? You have achieved just that in the piece..
I'm so greatful you wrote this..
Amazing, Really..
~Shadafakup
11/25/2003 c1
39Ciara Starr
Finally! Someone who sums up my feelings so elegantly and beautifully in a poem. Thank you. Keep up the good work!

Finally! Someone who sums up my feelings so elegantly and beautifully in a poem. Thank you. Keep up the good work!
11/9/2003 c1
27Moon Element
Oh, Gal. That is sad, but good. I love you. I'll always be there for you. Don't forget that. You really got your emotions across well. Nice job.

Oh, Gal. That is sad, but good. I love you. I'll always be there for you. Don't forget that. You really got your emotions across well. Nice job.