for The Doll12/16/2003 c1 jing
Hey lindy
the story so far is pretty good.
umm...fix ur spelling mistakes n u'll b able to send it taht competition thingy...
maybe u should make the story a bit more detailed in certain places...there could b something b4 the girl turned into a doll~~
all the best
love Jing
Hey lindy
the story so far is pretty good.
umm...fix ur spelling mistakes n u'll b able to send it taht competition thingy...
maybe u should make the story a bit more detailed in certain places...there could b something b4 the girl turned into a doll~~
all the best
love Jing
12/2/2003 c1 
3Epi Curean
Well, there are some things I like about this story and some things I don't.
Things I don't like:
1)Spelling errors
2)The length of the story - it ends before it starts
What I like:
1)The concept :)
What you should do to make the story better:
1)Make it longer
2)Run a spell check
3Epi CureanWell, there are some things I like about this story and some things I don't.
Things I don't like:
1)Spelling errors
2)The length of the story - it ends before it starts
What I like:
1)The concept :)
What you should do to make the story better:
1)Make it longer
2)Run a spell check
12/2/2003 c1 bianca
hey yeh it's goot buh dere's a few speeling errorz
hey yeh it's goot buh dere's a few speeling errorz
11/27/2003 c1 embattledcurve
the story line is good, ur writing style also nice, but u haven't really developed it. before the horror really starts, the fic's over. i suggest u elaborate on your theme a little more and make ur story longer.
the story line is good, ur writing style also nice, but u haven't really developed it. before the horror really starts, the fic's over. i suggest u elaborate on your theme a little more and make ur story longer.