for Kindness7/19/2006 c1 plok
Yeah, it definitely does seem like something Pearl S. Buck would write. The character kind of reminded me of the Wang the Second in Sons.
I think the moral of the story is how vulnerable the human desire for affection leaves us. This was a great and powerful man who ended up in poverty because of love. Too bad.
Yeah, it definitely does seem like something Pearl S. Buck would write. The character kind of reminded me of the Wang the Second in Sons.
I think the moral of the story is how vulnerable the human desire for affection leaves us. This was a great and powerful man who ended up in poverty because of love. Too bad.
12/18/2004 c1 Stephanie
very nicely written, i would look forward to readign more of your works.. =)
very nicely written, i would look forward to readign more of your works.. =)
8/8/2004 c1 
50Shadow Dragon 777
Yeah, you should right more stories. thgis was was really well written and I would definitely read it if you wrote another.
50Shadow Dragon 777Yeah, you should right more stories. thgis was was really well written and I would definitely read it if you wrote another.
12/2/2003 c1 8htmraw
...That was almost as good as Wisdom *smile*.
I think the moral is that when you help people and sacrifice things for them you become part of them so you never really lose what you have given up because it continues on even when the rest of you has been lost.
Wow, that's quite inspiring if I do say so myself.
If you have the time please write something new.
Bye
8htmraw...That was almost as good as Wisdom *smile*.
I think the moral is that when you help people and sacrifice things for them you become part of them so you never really lose what you have given up because it continues on even when the rest of you has been lost.
Wow, that's quite inspiring if I do say so myself.
If you have the time please write something new.
Bye
11/26/2003 c1 18Sallie Beaver
i luv this story! i've never read another like it, and i like how u have based it upon Confucious belief.
i like the happy ending, and how Fune Hui started out to be such a selfish man and became the opposite as soon as he met Mirth. a very clever story, with a moral that gives me a lot to think about. i would like it if you would continue to write more stories such as this!
-Sallie
18Sallie Beaveri luv this story! i've never read another like it, and i like how u have based it upon Confucious belief.
i like the happy ending, and how Fune Hui started out to be such a selfish man and became the opposite as soon as he met Mirth. a very clever story, with a moral that gives me a lot to think about. i would like it if you would continue to write more stories such as this!
-Sallie
11/21/2003 c1 Madrynea
Good idea, but you could develop it and make it much more touching. More detail, more about Mirth's love for her father (as it is, it sounds a bit like she just loves him for the money), more character development. You should also try to avoid phrases such as "he got hooked", that's far too colloquial for a serious text like this one.
Keep it up!
Good idea, but you could develop it and make it much more touching. More detail, more about Mirth's love for her father (as it is, it sounds a bit like she just loves him for the money), more character development. You should also try to avoid phrases such as "he got hooked", that's far too colloquial for a serious text like this one.
Keep it up!