for The Bitter Sea3/28/2004 c25 IzumiKoushiro
Great story, I loved. This reminds me of some of a movie called perfect blue. Anyways great story, really good mood setting. Please right more.
Great story, I loved. This reminds me of some of a movie called perfect blue. Anyways great story, really good mood setting. Please right more.
2/7/2004 c20 
31BleedingClowns13
I really like this story...is this the whole story, or is this more?
-Mandy-
31BleedingClowns13I really like this story...is this the whole story, or is this more?
-Mandy-
2/1/2004 c16 32Stormy Daye
So Kasper was the doctor's son? Interesting. I really like this story, lots of metaphors and stuff like that. I'm glad you update so fast, I hate it when people take two weeks to write something and it only ends up being HALF a chapter.
Anyway, good job!
32Stormy DayeSo Kasper was the doctor's son? Interesting. I really like this story, lots of metaphors and stuff like that. I'm glad you update so fast, I hate it when people take two weeks to write something and it only ends up being HALF a chapter.
Anyway, good job!
1/30/2004 c14 Stormy Daye
Good chapter. I wonder why Mara hasn't spoken to Alex? I hope she gets to see him again.
Good chapter. I wonder why Mara hasn't spoken to Alex? I hope she gets to see him again.
1/29/2004 c13 Stormy Daye
Well, I still think this story is very well written, you are a good writer. It is a different story, not what I expected. I like it though, I hope you update soon!
Well, I still think this story is very well written, you are a good writer. It is a different story, not what I expected. I like it though, I hope you update soon!
1/29/2004 c5 Stormy Daye
Okay... I'm a little bit confused. Who is the council? And how did they bring Mara back to life? What is her purpose, why does she have to have checkups and what was she ready for when she turned 16? Sorry for all the questions, maybe if I read the rest I'll know what is going on.
Okay... I'm a little bit confused. Who is the council? And how did they bring Mara back to life? What is her purpose, why does she have to have checkups and what was she ready for when she turned 16? Sorry for all the questions, maybe if I read the rest I'll know what is going on.
1/29/2004 c4 Stormy Daye
I really like this so far. It is very well written and it makes you want to keep reading to find out what will happen next. I'm going to read the rest a little later, but update soon!
I really like this so far. It is very well written and it makes you want to keep reading to find out what will happen next. I'm going to read the rest a little later, but update soon!
1/2/2004 c12 17Ravena Storm
O will Mara get to stay with Alex? Nasty evil council people, they should keep their dirty councilly hands off her. Great writing, loving the storyline.
17Ravena StormO will Mara get to stay with Alex? Nasty evil council people, they should keep their dirty councilly hands off her. Great writing, loving the storyline.
12/18/2003 c10 Ravena Storm
Intense. Very intense and I found it hard to get my mind round the story a little. Thank you =) I loved the chance of taxing my mind once more and just reading something which held emotion and storyline to it. I have to say this story it extremely good, very good in fact. Sad, yet warming and you can't help being drawn to Mara and her situation. I'm looking forward to more soon.
Intense. Very intense and I found it hard to get my mind round the story a little. Thank you =) I loved the chance of taxing my mind once more and just reading something which held emotion and storyline to it. I have to say this story it extremely good, very good in fact. Sad, yet warming and you can't help being drawn to Mara and her situation. I'm looking forward to more soon.
12/14/2003 c8 52FAKEromances
this is another chapter 9 review...i just wanted to say the part about her father at the end was sad, but beautiful :)
52FAKEromancesthis is another chapter 9 review...i just wanted to say the part about her father at the end was sad, but beautiful :)
12/14/2003 c9 FAKEromances
i still like! aww its sad in this chappy..angsty..BUT I STILL LIKE! so update more! :) we're all cheering for u lol
~b
i still like! aww its sad in this chappy..angsty..BUT I STILL LIKE! so update more! :) we're all cheering for u lol
~b
12/13/2003 c1 FAKEromances
hey! i like! i like a lot! i think it's great how you've brought the background into the first chapter, and started to show how her life became the way it is. i've read most of this, but i especially like how you've done the first chapter. very nice!
(p.s: r&r my stuff ... lol)
~b
hey! i like! i like a lot! i think it's great how you've brought the background into the first chapter, and started to show how her life became the way it is. i've read most of this, but i especially like how you've done the first chapter. very nice!
(p.s: r&r my stuff ... lol)
~b
12/4/2003 c6 bridget
Wow...this was an amazing story...probably one of my favorites on here..i identified so much with the wanting of escape, to reach beyond the obvious borders that surround me. one suggestion, chapters 5 and 6 get a little choppy, perhaps a more detailed transition explaining what's going on? youre a great writer!
Wow...this was an amazing story...probably one of my favorites on here..i identified so much with the wanting of escape, to reach beyond the obvious borders that surround me. one suggestion, chapters 5 and 6 get a little choppy, perhaps a more detailed transition explaining what's going on? youre a great writer!
11/24/2003 c1 10StarBorn77
Very unique as well written, which is something you don't find too often. A really great start.
10StarBorn77Very unique as well written, which is something you don't find too often. A really great start.