for The First Mage9/10/2007 c6 
28Erisah Mae
I really like the concept of this story, and so far like your style, but I have to know-
What the hell is the "australia of a goods wagon"?
Erisah
28Erisah MaeI really like the concept of this story, and so far like your style, but I have to know-
What the hell is the "australia of a goods wagon"?
Erisah
1/18/2006 c11 2Paper.Eskimo.Boots
Hm...is it just me or does this seem to be the exact same note at the end of one of your other stories? But I need to see what happens next! What happens with the mind-reader kid? I must know! :3
2Paper.Eskimo.BootsHm...is it just me or does this seem to be the exact same note at the end of one of your other stories? But I need to see what happens next! What happens with the mind-reader kid? I must know! :3
12/18/2004 c11 Rizwan
Well Rothwyn escarlata,I read all the chapters but didnt review them until now.you see i have a very bad habit of finishing a book bfore i review it.your story(i mean all the chapters that i read till now)looks to be fine,but u could add in a little more battles and a bit more descriptions of everyone.you should also describe the places where they visit.Anyways i like the work you had written down and i would love to see more of the story as soon as you can finish it.
Well Rothwyn escarlata,I read all the chapters but didnt review them until now.you see i have a very bad habit of finishing a book bfore i review it.your story(i mean all the chapters that i read till now)looks to be fine,but u could add in a little more battles and a bit more descriptions of everyone.you should also describe the places where they visit.Anyways i like the work you had written down and i would love to see more of the story as soon as you can finish it.
1/11/2004 c10 18Alcapacien
Crud...what about Gala! Is she going to be captured? I hope not...can't wait to read more!
18AlcapacienCrud...what about Gala! Is she going to be captured? I hope not...can't wait to read more!
1/10/2004 c3 22Loki Mischeif-Maker
I'll read more of this later. I promise.
The story is good- the world you've created is very compelling, and I like the talking horses. The beginning is awesome. The only problem I can think of is that sometimes the amount of discription you have sometimes weighs the action down a bit too much. However, the story is good.
Cheers.
22Loki Mischeif-MakerI'll read more of this later. I promise.
The story is good- the world you've created is very compelling, and I like the talking horses. The beginning is awesome. The only problem I can think of is that sometimes the amount of discription you have sometimes weighs the action down a bit too much. However, the story is good.
Cheers.
12/29/2003 c10 1Coeur de Milan
Wondrous! Absolutely wondrous! By the way I love Cato, where on earth did you have the inspiraton to think of him? It all slapped together a bit quickly, what with Cato having to go with them and all - that's the sort of plot that I've seen gone awry with other authors but it works with you. J'adore! Please update very soon, I beg of you.
1Coeur de MilanWondrous! Absolutely wondrous! By the way I love Cato, where on earth did you have the inspiraton to think of him? It all slapped together a bit quickly, what with Cato having to go with them and all - that's the sort of plot that I've seen gone awry with other authors but it works with you. J'adore! Please update very soon, I beg of you.
12/22/2003 c9 J'adore
Hurry up! You are taking absolutely forever to update and this is NO GOOD. Rothwyn hens will come to no good ends, or something of the like. That means (in my interpretation) that if you do not update soon your entire story shall be taken down from fictionpress.com and that will be NO GOOD END. By my logic, this means that you have exactly 24 hours to do so, or else I will be having a VERY SERIOUS WORD with the staff here!
Hurry up! You are taking absolutely forever to update and this is NO GOOD. Rothwyn hens will come to no good ends, or something of the like. That means (in my interpretation) that if you do not update soon your entire story shall be taken down from fictionpress.com and that will be NO GOOD END. By my logic, this means that you have exactly 24 hours to do so, or else I will be having a VERY SERIOUS WORD with the staff here!
12/16/2003 c9 Balancing Act
Beautiful chapter. I laughed so much at the part where the bed ate Tuck. I could just imagine it. Please continue, this is really a fun story, and your writing is beautiful.
Beautiful chapter. I laughed so much at the part where the bed ate Tuck. I could just imagine it. Please continue, this is really a fun story, and your writing is beautiful.
12/16/2003 c8 Balancing Act
OOh, we get to hear more about the characters. I guess Zaike isn't as shallow as we thought she was...
OOh, we get to hear more about the characters. I guess Zaike isn't as shallow as we thought she was...
12/16/2003 c7 Raal the Sword Master
Yes, Ma'am! Reviewing immediately! I love the language of this story. It's beautiful, and has such a lovely flow. The characters are fun, too, especially your thief with a Scottish accent-or the equivalent of a Scottish accent in Nor. The way you gave each horse a personality is lovely, as is the way you know the way a horse's "expressions". One thing I also especially like is that you didn't tell us the actual word, and that Narad's voice changes when he's speaking with the voice of the First Mage. Truly awesome. Now I'd better read this chapter.
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CLIFFHANGER! Well, kind of. It depends. Tuck is cool. I already said that, I know, but he is. So nonchalant. And the fact that Gala can talk to animals is fun-the horses seem like they would be really good friends, and it's really funny how Kavador and Rakshema each have their own peeves and personalities.
Yes, Ma'am! Reviewing immediately! I love the language of this story. It's beautiful, and has such a lovely flow. The characters are fun, too, especially your thief with a Scottish accent-or the equivalent of a Scottish accent in Nor. The way you gave each horse a personality is lovely, as is the way you know the way a horse's "expressions". One thing I also especially like is that you didn't tell us the actual word, and that Narad's voice changes when he's speaking with the voice of the First Mage. Truly awesome. Now I'd better read this chapter.
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CLIFFHANGER! Well, kind of. It depends. Tuck is cool. I already said that, I know, but he is. So nonchalant. And the fact that Gala can talk to animals is fun-the horses seem like they would be really good friends, and it's really funny how Kavador and Rakshema each have their own peeves and personalities.
12/15/2003 c9 mirabilis
A great story! can't wait for the next update!
Show some more of Narad's magic.
A great story! can't wait for the next update!
Show some more of Narad's magic.
12/14/2003 c9 1Tuesdays Cat
-eats rothwyn- NAUGHTY! BE NICE TO TUCK!
-clings- i wrote two more pages on rhys today after i felt better. will update tomorrow after i write some more.
in other news, i am in love with you. and gala is my child. -licks-
1Tuesdays Cat-eats rothwyn- NAUGHTY! BE NICE TO TUCK!
-clings- i wrote two more pages on rhys today after i felt better. will update tomorrow after i write some more.
in other news, i am in love with you. and gala is my child. -licks-
12/13/2003 c8 18Alcapacien
KEWL! I really am happy that you got Gala and Narad together! Anyways, can't wait for more
18AlcapacienKEWL! I really am happy that you got Gala and Narad together! Anyways, can't wait for more
12/11/2003 c8 1Coeur de Milan
I LOVE YOUR STORY! I just about died laughing upon reading Tuck's comment, "What be this?" This is just absolutely wonderful, PLEASE update NOW, immediately, as soon as humanely possibly, I now like Zaike, Tuck, everyone, your characters are amazing, and so will you please, please update? A life hangs in the balance. I am serious.
1Coeur de MilanI LOVE YOUR STORY! I just about died laughing upon reading Tuck's comment, "What be this?" This is just absolutely wonderful, PLEASE update NOW, immediately, as soon as humanely possibly, I now like Zaike, Tuck, everyone, your characters are amazing, and so will you please, please update? A life hangs in the balance. I am serious.