for Orphan5/8/2005 c3 
16amethystdawn
Finally, an explanation. A pretty good one at that. It's very dramatic, you know? ^_^ Anyways, I have to go. My mums telling me to go to slep... (I don't know how i'm suppose to sleep with a full tummy. It makes me uncomfy...)
16amethystdawnFinally, an explanation. A pretty good one at that. It's very dramatic, you know? ^_^ Anyways, I have to go. My mums telling me to go to slep... (I don't know how i'm suppose to sleep with a full tummy. It makes me uncomfy...)
5/8/2005 c2 amethystdawn
IT'S SO SHORT! damn cliffhangers... oh well. But don't you think you've jumped too far? I mean chapter one's about first meeting, then chapter two's like: huh? Maybe you should have filled it up a little more?
IT'S SO SHORT! damn cliffhangers... oh well. But don't you think you've jumped too far? I mean chapter one's about first meeting, then chapter two's like: huh? Maybe you should have filled it up a little more?
5/8/2005 c1 amethystdawn
I have decided to read this all of a sudden. Perhaps it's because it's the middle of the night and I am high on Chinese food? (I have no idea how that can happen.) Well, this chapter is short. Perhaps too short, but it's very meaningful. I think it's a great introduction. ^_^
PS: Remember when you reviewed chapter 9 of my story you said you hoped your review would motivate/inspire me? Well, Jez-arinn, you can move mountains.
PPS: i have updated and twice. *everyone gasps in shock*
I have decided to read this all of a sudden. Perhaps it's because it's the middle of the night and I am high on Chinese food? (I have no idea how that can happen.) Well, this chapter is short. Perhaps too short, but it's very meaningful. I think it's a great introduction. ^_^
PS: Remember when you reviewed chapter 9 of my story you said you hoped your review would motivate/inspire me? Well, Jez-arinn, you can move mountains.
PPS: i have updated and twice. *everyone gasps in shock*
7/3/2004 c15 kamui-kun
Oh my... the perfect ending! Oh my... just... speechless... I know theres some significance and symbolism in all of this things but I'm just taken away by the moment... Oh... gawd! Terrific story! And you end it with what I've been waiting for since the beginning! So his name was Tim! Great! Love it! What can I say? You're the master of drama, my friend. Keep it up and now I'm really eager to find out how your other stories would end. Great work once more! =)
Oh my... the perfect ending! Oh my... just... speechless... I know theres some significance and symbolism in all of this things but I'm just taken away by the moment... Oh... gawd! Terrific story! And you end it with what I've been waiting for since the beginning! So his name was Tim! Great! Love it! What can I say? You're the master of drama, my friend. Keep it up and now I'm really eager to find out how your other stories would end. Great work once more! =)
7/3/2004 c14 kamui-kun
First of all, I would like to congratulate you on such a wonderful chapter. Now do I just realize how much effort you put in arranging the events of this story, about how the speaker's quest to prove himself as a strong person had also led to this very painful lost. After reading this chapter, I found myself drinking a glass of water even though I wasn't thirsty... and this only happens when a.) something surprises me b.) I get a good idea in my head and c.) something hurts me. I think it's the combination of a and c which made me do it and not since I read Robert Jordan's books did I feel so much as I do after reading this. Terrific work! No BS. Off to the final one!
First of all, I would like to congratulate you on such a wonderful chapter. Now do I just realize how much effort you put in arranging the events of this story, about how the speaker's quest to prove himself as a strong person had also led to this very painful lost. After reading this chapter, I found myself drinking a glass of water even though I wasn't thirsty... and this only happens when a.) something surprises me b.) I get a good idea in my head and c.) something hurts me. I think it's the combination of a and c which made me do it and not since I read Robert Jordan's books did I feel so much as I do after reading this. Terrific work! No BS. Off to the final one!
7/1/2004 c13 kamui-kun
Yeah! He's alive! He's still alive! Ha! Mr. Speaker's a man of steel! =) Okay... maybe not quite as invincible as I once thought he was but at least he's up and moving. Two weeks unconscious? That's quite nasty for him. Oh well... after an accident like that I'm just happy he's all and well. Oh oh! Cops! Just when things seemed to be in his favor... enter the police. Nice chapter! Read more soon! =)
Yeah! He's alive! He's still alive! Ha! Mr. Speaker's a man of steel! =) Okay... maybe not quite as invincible as I once thought he was but at least he's up and moving. Two weeks unconscious? That's quite nasty for him. Oh well... after an accident like that I'm just happy he's all and well. Oh oh! Cops! Just when things seemed to be in his favor... enter the police. Nice chapter! Read more soon! =)
6/28/2004 c12 kamui-kun
Ow... now that's gotta hurt! How many times should they tell him to keep his eyes on the road? Wow, he was half dead and yet all that he remembered was his bike? That thing was his life, wasn't it? Well, now that it was gone, what does he have left? Poor boy. Good chapter! Love the description of the crash! Check the rest of this story soon! =)
Ow... now that's gotta hurt! How many times should they tell him to keep his eyes on the road? Wow, he was half dead and yet all that he remembered was his bike? That thing was his life, wasn't it? Well, now that it was gone, what does he have left? Poor boy. Good chapter! Love the description of the crash! Check the rest of this story soon! =)
6/27/2004 c11 kamui-kun
Oh! Stan's one big cheater! Damn! Where's this world coming to? What happened to things such as honor, dignity and the thrill of a fair challenge? Ha! I guess the title to the area's much bigger than those stuff. Anyway, good job. Hope the speaker shows them how to really handle a motorcycle. Try to read more soon!
Oh! Stan's one big cheater! Damn! Where's this world coming to? What happened to things such as honor, dignity and the thrill of a fair challenge? Ha! I guess the title to the area's much bigger than those stuff. Anyway, good job. Hope the speaker shows them how to really handle a motorcycle. Try to read more soon!
6/23/2004 c10 kamui-kun
Nice chapter! Powerful thoughts to supplement some powerful words between the speaker and Emily. Time has really changed him. During the first chappies, Emily was his world and now she wasn't even part of it. Ah... life... so painful... Good work! Nice drama! Try to read more soon! =)
Nice chapter! Powerful thoughts to supplement some powerful words between the speaker and Emily. Time has really changed him. During the first chappies, Emily was his world and now she wasn't even part of it. Ah... life... so painful... Good work! Nice drama! Try to read more soon! =)
6/20/2004 c9 kamui-kun
Yeah! Bike racing! I think I've never read this kind of stuff before so I believe it would be interesting! Ha! This really reminds me of torque! =) Anyway, good chapter! The speaker's cool and in control attitude is a plus in my book, as well as his witty remark back at the challenger! Keep up the good work!
Yeah! Bike racing! I think I've never read this kind of stuff before so I believe it would be interesting! Ha! This really reminds me of torque! =) Anyway, good chapter! The speaker's cool and in control attitude is a plus in my book, as well as his witty remark back at the challenger! Keep up the good work!
6/16/2004 c8 kamui-kun
Whoa! Very short chapter! Ah... so there's something more to his biker life than I first thought. Hm... he made a pact eh? Yeah, time could really change people... I guess she now has to live with that fact. Nice plot builder chap! Try to read more soon!
Whoa! Very short chapter! Ah... so there's something more to his biker life than I first thought. Hm... he made a pact eh? Yeah, time could really change people... I guess she now has to live with that fact. Nice plot builder chap! Try to read more soon!
6/13/2004 c7 kamui-kun
Really? There's contradiction? Hm... I didn't notice it... or maybe I'm just blind. Anyway, nice character development emphasized by the very strong dialogue between Emily and the speaker. I do pity the speaker for choosing this way of live and I really would like him to consider Emily's proposal. Maybe a change of heart is in store for him... but I think the second chapter proved what the result would turn out to be. Anyway, nice short chapter and I'll try to catch more soon! =)
Really? There's contradiction? Hm... I didn't notice it... or maybe I'm just blind. Anyway, nice character development emphasized by the very strong dialogue between Emily and the speaker. I do pity the speaker for choosing this way of live and I really would like him to consider Emily's proposal. Maybe a change of heart is in store for him... but I think the second chapter proved what the result would turn out to be. Anyway, nice short chapter and I'll try to catch more soon! =)
6/10/2004 c6 kamui-kun
Yey! After what seemed to be years of separation Emily and the boy finally meet! Kinda an awkward place to have a reunion =) ahh but I guess circumstances forces people to do with what they have. Wow, the boy still kept that pendant for all those years? Must really have true feelings for the girl if I may say so myself. So where do they go from hereon? Must read next chapter to find out! =) Good work once more! =)
Yey! After what seemed to be years of separation Emily and the boy finally meet! Kinda an awkward place to have a reunion =) ahh but I guess circumstances forces people to do with what they have. Wow, the boy still kept that pendant for all those years? Must really have true feelings for the girl if I may say so myself. So where do they go from hereon? Must read next chapter to find out! =) Good work once more! =)
6/7/2004 c5 kamui-kun
Another very short chapter but meaningful nonetheless. Nice way to show that even if his life had taken a whole new meaning and he was slowly forgetting about his past he still had a place in his heart for the one person that he truly cared for. Hm... all these biker stuff is beginning to remind me of the movie Torque.
Another very short chapter but meaningful nonetheless. Nice way to show that even if his life had taken a whole new meaning and he was slowly forgetting about his past he still had a place in his heart for the one person that he truly cared for. Hm... all these biker stuff is beginning to remind me of the movie Torque.
6/1/2004 c4 kamui-kun
Once again, nice character development! It's quite interesting to see what happened in those midyears after he had split from the orphanage. Hm... biking... I wanna try that someday when I have time. =) Anyway, could this sudden change in character be the cause of the seperation between him an Emily? Hm... interesting...
Once again, nice character development! It's quite interesting to see what happened in those midyears after he had split from the orphanage. Hm... biking... I wanna try that someday when I have time. =) Anyway, could this sudden change in character be the cause of the seperation between him an Emily? Hm... interesting...