for A Meeting11/23/2003 c1 Morph
This is a very good poem
This is a very good poem
11/22/2003 c1 Matt
This poem is not as strong as the others as if tends to fall back on the cliches of the genre, but is a decent effort nonetheless. It has a stream of conciousness quality to it that is most welcome but could have gone through a bit more refinement before reaching the final result. I liked the imagery but the overall narrative is murky and unsure of itself. Almost like it was written by someone who was halfway asleep. Overall it is a good effort, but could have done well to have been proofread and tweaked a bit before it was finished.
This poem is not as strong as the others as if tends to fall back on the cliches of the genre, but is a decent effort nonetheless. It has a stream of conciousness quality to it that is most welcome but could have gone through a bit more refinement before reaching the final result. I liked the imagery but the overall narrative is murky and unsure of itself. Almost like it was written by someone who was halfway asleep. Overall it is a good effort, but could have done well to have been proofread and tweaked a bit before it was finished.