for Not So Perfect1/2/2008 c22 Britt
You changed my mind about Amy. Terrific ending. :)
You changed my mind about Amy. Terrific ending. :)
1/2/2008 c16 Britt
You know personally i don't think Brittany is like her dad. I mean there's a difference between sex and making out. And her dad did it forever and she just did it once. She seems like she's in love with In the end i suppose i want Brittany and Josh to get together. I just don't think Amy is the one, y'know? She's a good person or whatever smart, pretty but i just think a stronger bond like Brittany and Josh has will last. Eh i can't wait to read how you finished this thing, i hope it's a shocker.
You know personally i don't think Brittany is like her dad. I mean there's a difference between sex and making out. And her dad did it forever and she just did it once. She seems like she's in love with In the end i suppose i want Brittany and Josh to get together. I just don't think Amy is the one, y'know? She's a good person or whatever smart, pretty but i just think a stronger bond like Brittany and Josh has will last. Eh i can't wait to read how you finished this thing, i hope it's a shocker.
1/1/2008 c15 GHEHGRN
Dude your awespem tioatlly awesomome! LOVE YOI! HEHE
Dude your awespem tioatlly awesomome! LOVE YOI! HEHE
4/21/2006 c23 
2BKGal-24
Gawd, this was one of the cutest things I've ever read. I started reading your latest story, but realized if I got sucked I'd be dissapointed because it appears you have much more to do than waste your time updating on FP (I whole heartedly agree with you.)
I read this in a little over an hour. I was perusing FP and found you randomly through a few clicks here and there and just wanted to finish it.
You really had me sucked in. I live vicariously through high school stories because high school was never like high school in fiction world.
I hope you don't think "cute" is a bad term. I reserve it for stories that make the inner girly girl in me sigh.
I am terribly anti-POV switching, but because you centered and structured the story well, it actually worked. Although, if you ever wrote this over, I'd recommend using soley Josh's POV or third person.
I envy authors who can write good stuff in 40K or less...I haven't mastered that yet. I can tell your writing has matured and changed a lot from reading the first few chaps of Average Story. I laughed when I read the prologue because my writing fits all of the things the protagonists warns about!
Yes, this is riddled with typos/errors, but that's not too important given this probably wasn't one of your serious works, but I just really adored it.
Thanks for sharing!
2BKGal-24Gawd, this was one of the cutest things I've ever read. I started reading your latest story, but realized if I got sucked I'd be dissapointed because it appears you have much more to do than waste your time updating on FP (I whole heartedly agree with you.)
I read this in a little over an hour. I was perusing FP and found you randomly through a few clicks here and there and just wanted to finish it.
You really had me sucked in. I live vicariously through high school stories because high school was never like high school in fiction world.
I hope you don't think "cute" is a bad term. I reserve it for stories that make the inner girly girl in me sigh.
I am terribly anti-POV switching, but because you centered and structured the story well, it actually worked. Although, if you ever wrote this over, I'd recommend using soley Josh's POV or third person.
I envy authors who can write good stuff in 40K or less...I haven't mastered that yet. I can tell your writing has matured and changed a lot from reading the first few chaps of Average Story. I laughed when I read the prologue because my writing fits all of the things the protagonists warns about!
Yes, this is riddled with typos/errors, but that's not too important given this probably wasn't one of your serious works, but I just really adored it.
Thanks for sharing!
4/5/2005 c23 Allie
Hey, I found your story today and couldnt stop till I was done. i found myself continually coming back to it. u did great and i will be readin some of your other work. good job.Me
Hey, I found your story today and couldnt stop till I was done. i found myself continually coming back to it. u did great and i will be readin some of your other work. good job.Me
8/27/2004 c1 14Black-raindb0w
niice. wow what a long story. 23 chapters! send it out to publishing or something.
ps. the gifted might have been confusing because it was the first chapter that u read lol
14Black-raindb0wniice. wow what a long story. 23 chapters! send it out to publishing or something.
ps. the gifted might have been confusing because it was the first chapter that u read lol
8/24/2004 c1 4life-is-death
Hey...I love the first chapater. As soon as I read about the whole 'Love' thing I thought, 'Hey, this might be good'. And it is! When I have some more time I will read the rest. Brilliant work...I like the way it is forming...
Anya
4life-is-deathHey...I love the first chapater. As soon as I read about the whole 'Love' thing I thought, 'Hey, this might be good'. And it is! When I have some more time I will read the rest. Brilliant work...I like the way it is forming...
Anya
2/18/2004 c1 10brownbear
whoa that's freaky! amy looks almost exactly like me! and i know someone named josh, but i don't really like him that much... anywho, i love the story so far. i don't normally find romance storis with the guys pov, but i like them better than the girls, i don't know why. anywho, on to the next chap!
b.b
10brownbearwhoa that's freaky! amy looks almost exactly like me! and i know someone named josh, but i don't really like him that much... anywho, i love the story so far. i don't normally find romance storis with the guys pov, but i like them better than the girls, i don't know why. anywho, on to the next chap!
b.b
2/14/2004 c22 Sonja
That was so cute! I really loved the story! But what happned to Brittany and Lucas? Well, anyway, loed the story, so thanks for writing it!
That was so cute! I really loved the story! But what happned to Brittany and Lucas? Well, anyway, loed the story, so thanks for writing it!
2/13/2004 c22 anonymous
great ending!
great ending!
2/13/2004 c22 7Tainted Tears
The end? It's actually over? Wow, I can't believe it. It seem kind-of, well... sudden. But it was nice, really, it was.
Well, I must say... this was a good read while it lasted. I'll check out your other stories as well, okay? See ya!
- TT
7Tainted TearsThe end? It's actually over? Wow, I can't believe it. It seem kind-of, well... sudden. But it was nice, really, it was.
Well, I must say... this was a good read while it lasted. I'll check out your other stories as well, okay? See ya!
- TT
2/13/2004 c22 AddADeleteFeature
Oh My! Well its weird now that this is done. . . but it was GREAT! I still am thinkning that Brittany should have gotten into a freak acident and died after the contest thing was over, but hey, whatever floats your boat mate.
Starlight :)
Oh My! Well its weird now that this is done. . . but it was GREAT! I still am thinkning that Brittany should have gotten into a freak acident and died after the contest thing was over, but hey, whatever floats your boat mate.
Starlight :)
2/13/2004 c23 34lil-popcorngurl
I cant belive you ended it! my friend ( lady starlight so kiss my ass.) is equally pissed.
I vote: SEQUAL! there has got to be one! pweezers!
34lil-popcorngurlI cant belive you ended it! my friend ( lady starlight so kiss my ass.) is equally pissed.
I vote: SEQUAL! there has got to be one! pweezers!