for Motion1/3/2008 c1 older ego
i love the way this poem is written... the rhyme is so perfect :]
keep writing your poetry is amazing
i love the way this poem is written... the rhyme is so perfect :]
keep writing your poetry is amazing
3/18/2004 c1 
9Admiral Rupert
Whoo, that was fun. You succeeded, I would say, in capturing the feeling of motion - the meter was fast, it FORCED me to read it fast, and it didn't let up for a second, not one hiccup. Excellent job.
9Admiral RupertWhoo, that was fun. You succeeded, I would say, in capturing the feeling of motion - the meter was fast, it FORCED me to read it fast, and it didn't let up for a second, not one hiccup. Excellent job.
2/16/2004 c1 91unwritten
i really liked it. the only thing is that there are some lines in there that it could probably do without, simply because they aren't as good as the others, and they add a kind of tediouses to the poem.
91unwritteni really liked it. the only thing is that there are some lines in there that it could probably do without, simply because they aren't as good as the others, and they add a kind of tediouses to the poem.
2/15/2004 c1 28Deluminated
Wow. I'd say you accomplished the goal that you mentioned in the summary.
It flows really well.
By the way, I added chapter three.
28DeluminatedWow. I'd say you accomplished the goal that you mentioned in the summary.
It flows really well.
By the way, I added chapter three.
12/4/2003 c1 Miza
Hey~ I like ur poem. U remind me of my self. The way you write is cool..keep up the good work aight!
Hey~ I like ur poem. U remind me of my self. The way you write is cool..keep up the good work aight!
11/29/2003 c1 150sunstormed
i like! it must have taken a long time to get everything to rhyme like that...awesome job!
150sunstormedi like! it must have taken a long time to get everything to rhyme like that...awesome job!